what do you think of this poem?

Question

i love to wright poetry but i reely suck at it cause i reely dont know what the heck my poems mean i just wright things down.i'll give you part of my poem that i wrote in memory of my friend this is the only poem i actually wrote that makes sense...be honest of what you think of my poem please( darkness has fallen. my voice hurts from callin,out but you can no longer hear me. theres not a star in the sky ,for me to look up to and though i keep crying i try so hard not to. but my friend is no longer here with me. its dark all around me .i try soo hard but i cant see no body not one person i'm swearing and i'm cursing. i'm so sick of this dark place and i wish that one more time i could see your smiling face shining as bright as the sun)well....... what do you think ??it's not the whole thing and i probably forgot a few parts please be honest...and that was my best poem i ever wrote when i find my other ones i'll put them up and you'll see how crappy they are..

Answer 1

well i agree with the other people here, (although i dont quite agree with Caroline's wording of loving the poem to "death" but anyway...)

It is a really good poem. If you want to get better, there are certain orders in which what words are supposed to rhyme with what words. Im sorry i cant tell you exactly what it is, but ask one of the english teachers at the school and they will be able to help you become even better.

Also, when presenting it, it makes it a little easier to read if you separate the poem into different lines.

Also, i think that i should add that while your other poems might not make sense to you, actually some of the more inspiring poems dont make any sense at all. The idea behind a lot of poetry is to just speak in metaphors. I wish i had an example but i dont. But anyway, keep up the good work!

Answer 2

Well there's what I call "professional" poetry, which is good and polished and all that, and then there's stuff like this. It really depends on what your objectives are. If you're writing poetry for sale or something, then yeah, you probably have to work at it a little. If all you wanted to do was communicate, all you have to do is write from the heart. That's honest poetry, raw, uncut and unpolished. It doesn't have to mean anything so long as you're being honest with your words.

Answer 3

It is Your inspiration and desire and emotions that come together when you write poetry. How you feel. What moves you. It is a total expression of yourself. It does not have to make sense to anyone that it simply is, is enough. Often when I write it is like something else takes over and it just flows.....when you are called to write, the urge overcomes, then you go with it. It will amaze you where your writing can take you. Follow your natural ability it will in time become perfected. It is very promising.

Answer 4

I think its really amazing! Giveyourself some slack.. ur all like "ITS CRAPPY!" But it really really isnt! i loveee it to death


be nice to urself, get confidence ;D its the only way you'll succeed.
heres a poem for you.


If you think you are beaten, you are
If you think you dare not, you dont,
IF YOUD LIKE TO WIN BUT THINK YOU CANT
its almost a cinch that you wont

if you think you'll loose ur lost
for out in the world we find
SUCCESS BEGINS WITH A FELLOWS WILL
its all in the state of mind

if you thihhnk ur outclassed you are
Youve got to think high to rise
youve got to be sure of yourself
before you can win the prise

lifes battles dont always go
to the strongest or fastest man
BUT SOONER OR LATER, THE MAN WHO WINS IS THE MAN WHO THINKS HE CAN!

Walter D. Wintle

ok read the capital letters, those are important

Answer 5

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not unavoidably ought to rhyme notwithstanding it desires to hit my thoughts. i imagine readability of expression is necessary besides. i do not elect to 2d wager what i'm interpreting about. I continuously seek for what I time period "poetic gemstones"contained in the textual content.

Answer 6

It sounds like a very good start....just remember practice makes perfect. Good luck & best wishes!

Answer 7

it sounds like this one;
if i fall apart
would i still be art

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