I recently wrote an ode to all the fruit pickers in the fields. Share your thoughts?

Question

I'm writing an anthology. This first one is about strawberry pickers:

There were never strawberries
like the ones we had
that sultry afternoon
sitting on the step
of the open french window
facing each other
your knees held in mine
the blue plates in our laps
the strawberries glistening
in the hot sunlight
we dipped them in sugar
looking at each other
not hurrying the feast
for one to come
the empty plates
laid on the stone together
with the two forks crossed
and I bent towards you
sweet in that air

in my arms
abandoned like a child
from your eager mouth
the taste of strawberries
in my memory
lean back again
let me love you

let the sun beat
on our forgetfulness
one hour of all
the heat intense
and summer lightning
on the Kilpatrick hills

let the storm wash the plates

Answer 1

Not bad. Thanks for sharing.

Answer 2

Interesting

Answer 3

It's just like online gaming vs the real life. Like Wizard101, you can be quick friends, just by clicking the 'Add Friend' button. But it takes more than a chat or two to become connected to have a friendship-relationship.

Answer 4

Edwin Morgan wrote the strawberry poem..

Give us another one..
hee hee woodlander thats funny

Answer 5

What does this have to do with immigration? Nice poem, but odd category.

Answer 6

I see the immigration forum poet is back.

Answer 7

http://www.cs.rice.edu/~ssiyer/minstrels/poems/827.html

that poem is by Edwin Morgan

nice work of plagarism

Answer 8

Guess what all the fruit pickers are NOT DOING.....

Collecting welfare and writing odes.

Answer 9

Hmmm...I picked strawberries, beans, corn, okra, etc. when I was a kid. I was born and raised here in the states. Thanks for the ode, man!

Answer 10

Not bad, even for you, Tina. Which one are you, I'm confused!

Answer 11

'I recently had a poem'....zzzzzz Nero fiddled, while Rome burned. How many people have entered the United States illegally from Mexico in the last HOUR? Hmmmm...