I'm a high school senior and I like this girl which until recently was outta limits. I've already decided that I'm gonna make a move and it's going to involve what else but LOVE POETRY?!! so nobody's going to dissuade me (convince me not to) do this. I just wanna know what a bunch of random strangers think about this wonderful pearl I just pulled out of my... hat.
It’s hard to say in words
what I’m feeling to this day.
I try to open my mouth
but suddenly become afraid.
I know there is no future,
no purpose for this note.
This rose will go to waste,
I live with only hope.
Whether it lives or it dies,
I will walk out okay.
This rose grew from my heart,
at first a heavy burden.
I refused to believe,
I used to deny,
but now I can no longer hide this deep secret.
I have left the safety of my shell,
which did well to me.
Now I’m taking a chance.
Will I fall or will I fly?
It sounds improbable,
almost too obvious.
How can I fly when I have no wings?
But it’s a simple question,
with a simple answer.
was I tricked by my heart?
will I drown in the truth?
or will I take sudden flight,
in the skies, the deep blue?
if I am the fish,
you the ocean.
if I am the star,
you are the heavens.
if I were to tell you, who would believe
that Old Cupid’s arrow
has made a slave out of me?
2006-10-31 08:29:57 · 10 answers · asked by sdaoh 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
btw, 99.8% chance she doesn't like me. 89% chance that she doesn't even care who I am. but the feeling inside is too hard to keep inside. I have to tell her no matter what. That's stupid, but that's love.
2006-10-31 08:32:19 · update #1
wow. thanks for the responses. I can understand some of the constructive criticisms but I'll take my chances anyway. I've already stalled this for TOO long, I need to do this now or never.
2006-10-31 08:52:07 · update #2
That is so cute!!!!Good luck.I kno i would luv it..Ur real talented..
2006-10-31 08:33:39 · answer #1 · answered by *~Love?~* 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it's okay. Good luck getting your girl. If you are going to give this poem to her, add some romance and emotions from you personally.
2006-10-31 08:33:00 · answer #2 · answered by leazngurl 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like the tale, yet artwork on getting the rhythm to be somewhat extra consistent. you're rhyming A
2016-10-21 01:32:43 · answer #3 · answered by comesana 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its oaky i kinda like it but like you said nobody can talk you out of this but i dont thinky ou should give this to her now me being a gurland stuff i think you should waut intil yallin a relattionship and give this to her. plus some gurls dont like senative boys
2006-10-31 08:35:42 · answer #4 · answered by take it or leave it 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww its a really cute poem. i would go out with a dude if they wrote that to me...well if they werent some looser kid nobody. but yeah its cute
2006-10-31 08:33:54 · answer #5 · answered by kole 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aw that's really sweet
2006-10-31 08:35:29 · answer #6 · answered by crybaby 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I DO LIKE THE POEM BUT I THINK ITS TOO LONG
2006-10-31 08:36:06 · answer #7 · answered by D.L.G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
...will you ask me out? hahah
seriously though, girls are suckers for poems like this!
2006-10-31 08:35:14 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww how cute, great poem!
2006-10-31 08:32:32 · answer #9 · answered by &d. i. l. i. hawt; 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is sooooooooooooo cute. i love it!!!!
2006-10-31 08:34:17 · answer #10 · answered by Loving 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋