Help me perfect my personal statement & referrence letters pleaz?

Question

Hi, I'm a girl from China, a senior majored in law. Nowadays I'm trying to apply for LL.M degree in U.S law schools, but I'm not quite sure about dictions, grammars, tone...in my PS and referrence letters, so I wish there could be a native english speaker to help me modify and perfect them. If you could do me a favor, it would be a great great help! Thanx for reading this....hopefully someone can really gimme a hand...
Wish you good luck, and god bless~

Answer 1

this a formal letter- first the format

DATE------------

TO:---------------write the name of the concern person
position
address

FROM:----------your name
position
address

SUBJECT:----state the subject matter for example-Applying for a
Degree

Sir/Madam;

I would like to inform you my intentions to enroll in your respective university. Im residing in china, and im in my senior year, taking up (write yourcourse) my major is Law. Im interested to enroll to your respective University to continue my degree in Law.
I would highly appreciate it ,if you could furnish me the list of requirements required and documents needed.

Attatched herewith are my (write/type the documents you were able to submit for temporary reference)documents for future reference.(be sure to attach your curriculum data and certification from your school for verification, and dont forget the recommendation from the your school)state and ask the required data of points and grades to the university whereas you intended to enroll.

Thanks so much for giving me all the informations needed.
Im waiting for your response.

Respectfully yours,

your name

this is simple and direct to the point with politeness letter. if you would like to add something , you may do so. and be sure to attache all your documents for future reference.