Her beauty was so gold until one day. It was outta control taking people for granite. Some say her beauty was close to Janet. Use to own a band went to the beach played in the sand. Hold in hands with her boyfriend now known as her ex-man. Couldn’t understand how it came to waste? A wonderful woman with a beautiful face cursed. Now to walk the earth in disgrace man that’s a cold fate. Life has wonders but for her it’s to late…But for her it’s too late.
Hey beauty no more what other secrets do you have in store? What do you have to share? Should we be alert or aware hey beauty no more Why aren’t you there?
The other day I ran into her in the mall. She was dressed high matinace on the phone making valued calls. With a pause she said I look nice took me out to lunch. Invited me over for dinner thoughts to myself wow what a winner buying all the goods. So she can impress the hoods let me tell you something. Brothers in the streets play ruff are up to no good. And that’s a true fact you can ask pearl they broke into her catalytic. Taking all they can Pearl realized she never wanted a man. But it’s all in one ear and out the rest life is full of wonders. But hers was just a mess…Hers was just a mess
Hey beauty no more what other secrets do you have in store? What do you have to share? Should we be alert or aware hey beauty no more Why aren’t you there? (2x)
A year later she’s still the same everybody wondering will she ever change… And that’ll take sometime before those words ever reach her mind in time. Blindsided by the atmosphere wishing she could take it all back disappear. Going a little deeper into the grave looking for the heart is it still in caves. Taking deep breaths so she tries’s to stay brave. Not lost in the mode besides the frustration note to self perhaps a little education. Is great for the health and to the fellas let them be themselves. The only person you should impress is you have you figured it out hope you got the clues. Stay in the right direction maybe my advice will give you some perfection. At least we try so pay attention and keep your mind in the right dimension…You must follow rules to pay them dues…Must follow rules to pay them dues.
Hey beauty no more what other secrets do you have in store? What do you have to share? Should we be alert or aware hey beauty no more Why aren’t you there? (2x)
2006-10-24 19:10:45 · 10 answers · asked by aznflippgurl 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
thats cool man.kinda like a song are you in a band?
2006-10-24 19:25:58 · answer #1 · answered by bemo_14 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not unavoidably might desire to rhyme despite the fact that if it desires to hit my thoughts. i think of readability of expression is critical to boot. i do no longer prefer to 2nd wager what i'm reading approximately. I continually seek for what I term "poetic gem stones"interior the text cloth.
2016-11-25 19:36:15 · answer #2 · answered by maza 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Uhh..... v.v'... I commend your effort for trying to write something this long, but... ummm... it's a no for me. This isn't a poem; this is more similar to song lyrics. Lose the modern vibe, meaning references to the mall, phone calls... etc. And use proper spelling and grammar... PLEASE!
2006-10-24 19:17:11 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It does not do it for me ! I think you listen to too much Rap music ?
2006-10-24 19:15:50 · answer #4 · answered by g_man 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds more like a song --- and probably would be a bestseller
its good but i wont rave over it :)
2006-10-24 19:22:56 · answer #5 · answered by trader1867 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it, but you would think about making it a song.
2006-10-24 19:56:56 · answer #6 · answered by goof ball 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wonderful
2006-10-24 19:17:05 · answer #7 · answered by charles d 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ooooooo yeah. got my loins tingling, well done!!!!
2006-10-24 19:13:37 · answer #8 · answered by a_bike_guy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sucks big time!!!
2006-10-25 05:22:37 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it. you're good.
2006-10-24 19:17:00 · answer #10 · answered by sweettee 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋