I am giving it to her, not the way it is I am going to sort through the lines and add and remove. I want to know what the Girls and Mature Guys think about it.
Everyday you are not with me, I feel something is missing.
My heart riped out, with a spoon, and given to you.
My time spent thinking of you holding me tight until the morning light.
Don't break my heart, I won't survive without you.
You are my first true love, a love I can't resist.
Nothing can replace a moment with you.
You are always on my mind, like a reminder of why I keep trying.
I'd give anything to to see that smile.
If I see you in my dreams that night I know everything will be all right.
Stay by my side, without you I'd be no more for I love you more and more with each breath.
Even though I am on your leash, my heart skips a beat when I see you by my side.
Andrea you are my heart and soul.
You are the rose surrounded by thorns.
You are an angel, you are my paradise.
You are the light at the end of time.
I look into your eyes and lose track of time.
You are the one, for me.
You are the one I have always known, even before the beginning of time.
I have alot of nerve, thinking I in the least deserve you.
I loved you yesterday, I love you today, I will love you tomorow in every way.
In my heart I pray you stay.
Keeping me motivated, keeping me with you.
You are my angel, you are my heart and soul.
Sitting here tonight, all I can think about is you, and me together forever.
Your beauty is envied by the stars.
The sparkle in your eyes reminds me of light hitting a raindrop, just right.
Your radiant glow, reminds me of the warm glow of snow while the sun begins to rise.
The way you move, reminds me of the eb and flow of the world's tides.
The thousand ships weren't sent to rescue Helen, I sent them for you.
You are an angel, you are my heart and soul.
You make it all worth while.
Me and you together forever, is what i want to carve into every tree.
You make "HI" mean something, it means you are giving me the key to set me free.
I refuse to believe that you would not give me a chance.
It would be an act against nature, time, and most importantly us.
From the moment I met you, I knew you were special. One of a kind, like the one snowflake that draws you to it.
2006-10-22 07:40:04 · 9 answers · asked by The Question Man 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
the spoon thing, i had just watched robin hood the new one and i ment to take it out.
2006-10-22 09:14:44 · update #1
Hmmmmmmmm sounds good. I wish I can write a poem that is that good other then that keep up the good work.
Peace out, bro!
2006-10-22 07:47:40 · answer #1 · answered by what_it_do? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good One
2006-10-22 14:46:53 · answer #2 · answered by wittlewabbit 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Intense, lovely and deep. But the 2nd line...is so graphic I cringed and it took away from the rest of the prose/poem. You might want to rethink that line. :D
2006-10-22 14:47:33 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
way to wordy. She will surely fall asleep before she gets to the end. Revise it and make it no longer than 4 verses.
2006-10-22 14:43:29 · answer #4 · answered by D.C 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Everything is in there... but making it shorter (5 lines at most) will rekindle a flame inside her better.
2006-10-22 14:50:27 · answer #5 · answered by Wild_Angel 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
woo thats deep my name is andrea and i loved it. your real deep with your feelings thats a great guality. you will find that special someone i know you will you seem like an awesome person inside and out
2006-10-22 14:45:07 · answer #6 · answered by evilbitch92482 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Really good just to long shorten it to about half. She will love it good job
2006-10-22 14:47:48 · answer #7 · answered by lem604 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is so sweet, she'll love it.
2006-10-22 14:46:12 · answer #8 · answered by kira 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cool.
2006-10-22 18:42:56 · answer #9 · answered by EL GANGSTA. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋