The sky dark grey a rain bearing a nervous chill fell from the sky , And I stood before it strong and brave while unsure inside, Could this clearing that I seek exist, shall I find the rainbow of my senses in your branches. I taste the apple red with passion. And find it quenches my hunger leaving me content. I taste the berry blue with calm, As it soothes my manner and stills the rush of chaotic thought. I taste the orange aglow with warmth, lifts me from the cold embrace of the uncertain, I taste the grape purple with substance, finding a sense of comfort in her unique character. I taste the banana yellow of kindred, and rejoice in fact that I shall never walk alone, I taste the lime green with envy, the bitter bite of wonder how one would not tend the balance of the garden. So I stand against the driving rain of my doubts and preconceptions, for this garden is fresh not wrought with the ash of failed harvest. Her branches are inviting calling me ever closer. For as the skys brighten the rain of chill succumbs to the warm sun she kisses my brow. Assuring me that I shall reach the clearing which draws ever closer. And I know there I will find her branches open to me. As I find the warm shelter for my dream, I shall never falter in the tending of our garden.
2006-10-21 12:50:30 · 12 answers · asked by madrock69 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
Your use of words, sensory perceptions, metaphors, are so refreshing. & beautiful. My feeling is that you followed your muse- nothing was "contrived" or "borrowed." I feel your sinceriity & passion. As a writer, I've read so many friend's poems, manuscripts, given to me for my critque. I never give unearned strokes. You are talented, & unique.
2006-10-21 14:02:03 · answer #1 · answered by Valac Gypsy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not unavoidably might desire to rhyme besides the indisputable fact that it needs to hit my emotions. i think of readability of expression is significant as properly. i do no longer choose to 2d wager what i'm interpreting approximately. I continually seek for what I term "poetic gem stones"interior the text fabric.
2016-10-15 06:53:15 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
love it.
you are speaking your mind through writing. that is awesome.
i think the poems was awesome and feel tells how you feel.
great job!
kudos!
2006-10-21 12:54:45 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is awesome
My heart is at a calm
the Garden..........
name it
The garden
and you will never walk alone!
2006-10-21 13:04:35 · answer #4 · answered by beantown10955 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW! Very vivid. I don't know how to tell you how much I liked it because my words will sound stupid next to yours.
2006-10-21 13:00:02 · answer #5 · answered by starmoishe 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great personification and metaphores! keep up the good work!
2006-10-21 13:00:47 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
cool
2006-10-21 16:32:29 · answer #7 · answered by amberharris20022000 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
AHHH its amazing
2006-10-21 15:51:20 · answer #8 · answered by dance_diva_wb_18 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i loved it! thought it was very good: )
2006-10-21 13:22:57 · answer #9 · answered by kkk09 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it`s a little harsh
2006-10-21 12:52:52 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋