"when i first saw u i was afraid to meet you . when i first meet you i was afraid to hold you. when i hold you i was afraid to kiss you. when i first kiss you. i was afraid to love u. now that i love im afraid to lose you."
2006-10-17 12:09:47 · 33 answers · asked by aznflippgurl 5 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
love at first sight.
nice going
keep it up.
2006-10-17 12:12:25 · answer #1 · answered by prince47 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When I first saw you, I was afraid to meet you . When I first met you, I was afraid to hold you. When I held you, I was afraid to kiss you. When I first kissed you, I was afraid to love you. Now that I love you, I'm afraid to lose you.
I thought it was a great poem. So I took the time to fix some of the grammar. Get this to your loved one and he/she will melt!
2006-10-17 12:14:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice and all but it's been used to often now that I wouldn't use ti for anything...espeically ig you're planning on sending this to your boyfriend or something because in a relationship, you want to send positive thoughts. That poem you gave us to read is positvity throughout and all of a sudden at the end, there's this huge PLOP of negativity set right there and I think that ruins that cute smile a guy could give you. Hmm..but that's just my opinion so it's really up to what you decide for whatever you're askign this for. Yeap =]
2006-10-17 12:13:33 · answer #3 · answered by Lina 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good, but that second line should be When I held you {past tense}
I do like it a lot. Add {ed} to the second Kiss and When I first met you. and now that I love you I'm afraid to lose you.
2006-10-17 12:21:43 · answer #4 · answered by Sugar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes it is a great poem that same poem was in the movie 10 things I hate about you with Julie Stiles and Heath Ledger. Haven't seen it yet you should it's pretty good. but yes it is a good poem classic ....
2006-10-17 12:14:16 · answer #5 · answered by Cathleen Spencer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great words.... bad structure... try re wording some of the words also.
when i first seen u i was afraid to talk to you.
when i first talked to you i was afraid to touch you.
when i touched you i was afraid to kiss you.
when i first kissed you. i was afraid to love u.
now that i love im afraid to let you go.
now that i've let you go i want you back.
yet i know you will live forever in my heart.
try that.
2006-10-17 12:15:58 · answer #6 · answered by bigpoppa_2x@verizon.net 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly? It sounds like someone who needs to be more secure with themselves before falling in love. Because whatever insecurities you have "before", is going to flow into any relationship. But then, this is just what I see when I read your words. Good luck.
2006-10-17 12:15:17 · answer #7 · answered by Republican!!! 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd like it more if I didn't hate the concept of love with every fiver of my being. Nonetheless, it's short but sweet.
2006-10-17 14:17:51 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow that was a really good poem i wish i could right like that !!!!!!!!!
you should be a poet. is that what your trying to be?
youd be good at it! i wish you luckif thats what you want to be and iif its for school i know it will be an A+. and if your going to give ot to someone you like i know thell like you if they already dont!!!!! but any ways good job!!! i liked it.
2006-10-17 12:23:14 · answer #9 · answered by ♥janelle♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a great poem, I would just suggest that you use a little better punctuation and grammar.
2006-10-17 12:12:12 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋