tell me how you feel when you read this poems?

Question

just feelings....




never things still as it forever...
that`s what a life taught me in my life...
and this what i knew and felt...
when i searched about the faces around me,...
i and didn`t find any of those who i knew ...
searched about the faces which i loved...
searched about the faces whom i thought that they loved me..
but didn`t find that whom i loved or at least thought that...
every thing never to be and to still as it...
even a human kind too...

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By hazem02


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please read my poems and leave me your comments..
yours
hazem

Answer 1

Its really good. Why not give it to the newspapers, you can become famous.

Good luck

Answer 2

Lonely...

It's full of thought and pondering. However, it is not complete in it's sentence structure. This is a must if you want to make a good poem even better. I write a lot of poetry and some short stories. I have been published. Right now I am working on a novel. I have a friend who is a screenplay writer. My Grandfather wrote poetry for over 50 years. I have a cousin who is also published. Suggestions, if I may....?

Lines 1 and lines 7, 8, 9, 10

Line 1 -- Things are never forever
Line 2 -- That is what this life has taught me
Line 7 -- Searched about the faces of those I thought loved me
Line 8 -- I didn't find those ones I thought I loved
LIne 9 -- Everything never to be and still it is
Line 10 -- ????? Human nature????

Answer 3

i think offended and mutually empathize with the author. offended because he has allowed self pity and feeling of unworthiness to becloud his/her judgement of life. at the same time as human beings go away you. the perfect element to do is flow on. Empathy for the author seem an outstanding man or woman. solid and undesirable human beings have evil come their way now and again. So brace up! solid poem no doubt.

Answer 4

Gloomy and negative charactor . Unable to see light at least in your poem. I have gone through only single poem in the yahoo answers. I hope I am not offending you.

Answer 5

It sounds nice but I think you need to do something about the ending, let's have something specifically tangible to hold on to.

Answer 6

below average but its the thought that counts

Answer 7

it leaves me empty, feeling as if i'd been decieved