Do you think the use of "with some notes" and "Please this difference be revised" work here?

Question

Having reviewed the second-year workplan, we approve this workplan WITH SOME NOTES:

1.This workplan will be very useful if the target to be achieved in this second year’s activity is mentioned so that at the end of the second year implementation we will be able to compare between the expected target and the achieved result.

2.We also find difference between narrative workplan and the table of activity plan. In the narrative it is mentioned that roundtable on business environment will be established in 6 provinces while it is only 4 provinces in table of activities. PLEASE THIS DIFFERENCE BE REVISED.

The approval for this workplan will be applied retroactively for the activities that have been approved between May and October 2006.

Please send changes and adjustment of this second year’s workplan in no more than 2 weeks.

I am waiting for your response in relation to this issue and thank you for your cooperation and attention.

Answer 1

2.We also find difference between narrative work plan and the table of activity plan. In the narrative it is mentioned that round-table on business environment will be established in 6 provinces while it is only 4 provinces in table of activities. PLEASE THIS DIFFERENCE BE REVISED.

2.We also find a difference between the narrative work-plan and the table-of-activity plan. In the narrative it is mentioned that a round-table on business environment will be established in 6 provinces while there are only 4 provinces in the table of activities. Please correct this difference.

The last sentence could also read, "Please revise this difference.".