It's just a poem I came up with. Plz don't be so mean though.
it's finally happned, I've fallen for another. Excited to scream aloud, my mind off track, Wanting to speak to him so badly, but I'm scared again!
He resembles both the beast that held me down for so long, and also the one that everyone dies to become. Now intimindation has taken over me.
I fear his judgment will not alow him to return my affection. Almost positive he won't. But I still can't stop my heart from falling on the floor.
It has nothing to do with my life...Ok, so it partly does. But this just came off the top of my head. Plz don't be so mean! Thank u!
2006-10-11 10:02:23 · 15 answers · asked by Read the nametag, Duh! 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I don't see anything wrong with it.
2006-10-11 10:05:03 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like the poem you wrote, a while back i would have said it kinda sounded like my life but now i am happly married to the guy that i was so scared to love cause my heart was on the line
2006-10-11 10:05:35 · answer #2 · answered by michaelslady95 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was really good. those sound like poems that i write. i have a question if this is actually how you feel why dont you just go up and ask the guy if he likes you i mean you only live once girl.
2006-10-11 10:05:41 · answer #3 · answered by howdy19 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it doesn't matter what we think... it matters what you think. poetry is an expression of the writer... and others may never understand it. Example, my favorite 2 lines from my favorite poem, "You say hello, but i don't believe you."
Doesn't make sense... might not even if you read the whole thing... but to me, i completely understand.
2006-10-11 10:04:42 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
u ve done a good job in ur poem,it's very realistic and simple, but u can do better
2006-10-11 10:13:57 · answer #5 · answered by stonebornturbo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. I hope you find peace with your life and have more faith in your abilities. Chances are...he is just as intimidated as you are.
2006-10-11 10:05:49 · answer #6 · answered by ?? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
IT SOUNDS GREAT, needs a Little work. Keep it up you will surly get better & better.... STAY HAPPY...
2006-10-11 10:07:01 · answer #7 · answered by GUNSMITH 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad
2006-10-11 10:04:45 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
this poem is really nice especially if you wrote it yourself
2006-10-11 10:05:44 · answer #9 · answered by King J 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
2006-10-11 10:03:41 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋