My love towards you was not instantaneous,
And I never saw myself liking you so much,
But it came into my heart, completely and complete.
And it’s still here, right here in my heart.
My love towards you was like a child craving for candy and ice cream
Wanting sweetness to make them pleased and hopefully making you pleased.
Love is not a choice, but rather a sudden feeling towards another.
Love is not a choice, just as precious life is not a choice.
I’m glad that love directed me to you because if it hadn’t, I would be devastated until Death comes to Me.
There is nothing in the World that could change my mind about how I’m feeling about you right now.
Because of you I am able to smile, I am happy.
Because of you I am able to love.
If it was all for you, I’m willing to go to hell and stay there for eternity,
And still happy as ever to see you if I ever get to see you again
2006-10-08 11:12:31 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Ah, it is cute. it is fine .. don't change anything in a poem once it is written. remember, it comes from the inspiration .. and the "inspiration', sometimes is not logical. Anyways now, it belongs to the one who inspired you... keep it in the same way ... nothing is missing, trust me, enamorado.
2006-10-08 11:29:10 · answer #1 · answered by NA 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Write it as prose, on pretty paper, and give it to her as a love letter.
Condense some of the thoughts you've expressed into a shorter poem, maybe even a haiku:
Sudden. Surprising.
Wanting sweetness, craving you.
Life. Love. All for you!
2006-10-08 11:44:51 · answer #2 · answered by 2 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In my opinion, the length must not be changed, merely the last line altered. It says "And still happy as ever to see you if I ever get to see you again." It should say " And still happy as ever to see you if ever I see you again." You have to be fluid. Arrange the words so that they roll off the tongue. Make it special and original. Change the lines to flow like liquid from a glass into the heart of the reader.
2006-10-08 11:17:47 · answer #3 · answered by youngblade 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was ok actually until you got to the part about going to hell for eternity for a girl...and that does not set right with me....them are strong words,,,,and god is real and so is hell...i would not want or say i would go to hell for anyone....
2006-10-08 11:17:04 · answer #4 · answered by sanangel 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
actually..i think something needs to be tooken out... the poem is so, mature sounding until that part about the child cravings....that, i think, ruins it.
2006-10-08 11:15:48 · answer #5 · answered by ღсяаՀу∙թіхіе∙ժմѕτღ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THROW SOMETHING ABOUT EVE IN THERE. IF SHE IS A CHRISTIAN SHE'LL GET SO INSPIRED, SHE MIGHT EVEN BE ABLE TO FIX A BROKEN TV JUST BY HERSELF.
2006-10-08 11:15:48 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you would like actually go to hell for this dude..? chic u got it baaaaaaaad.....like omg like totally bad...shame on u
2006-10-08 11:16:39 · answer #7 · answered by princess 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Because of you, I live.
2006-10-08 11:15:47 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Now i need to look for my sick bucket
oh my god too late **** it!
2006-10-08 11:16:48 · answer #9 · answered by diane c 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
because of u, i am feelin u
because of u , i am wanting u
because of u , i am lovin u
becau of u, I am ........ "LOVE"
2006-10-08 11:19:26 · answer #10 · answered by mojajazmo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋