Touches so soft,
But at times pressing,
Wanting.
Feeling.
Needing.
Demanding.
Words...
Whispered...
In the husky deep voices of teenage boys
Words that could only please a girl,
A silly girl
Who had just escaped
The sweet bounds of childhood
And entered the hell
Of adolescence.
Words...
Sweet.
Pleasing.
Fulfilling.
Delighting.
With meanings behind them...
By the mind of a young twelve year old girl.
Glances...
Filled with lust.
Mystery.
Wanting.
Longing.
Yearning.
Hidden and lost.
In the darkness of their eyes.
Glances...
Stolen by me.
And taken of me..
Thoughts and intentions...
Unknown by me.
Passed under my radar.
Undetected.
Alien.
Strange.
To the my simple mind..
All I wanted...
All I needed...
All I craved...
Was attention.
A hug here.
A hug there.
A hug whore.
Small arms wrapped around...
Around the shoulders of many boys.
My hands clasping each other.
Feeling the hardness of their chests.
The curve of bone...
Their muscular backs and shoulders.
Their warmth...
Feeling a strange happiness fill me.
Like I was filled.
Like I was wanted.
Like I was needed.
2006-10-07 12:53:42 · 23 answers · asked by susannah 1 in Health ➔ Mental Health
that was every nice. if this is about you then you need to find help and see why you fel this way if it something off the top of your head then it is a dark look in the real world that people live. In what you wrote has alot of meaning and sorrow with the longing to be see by others. you have the gift of putting feeling in to words and that is good. you need to keep this up and look for the up side of thing and life, so when life has it down side write about it with the up side finsh...... when you write more like this i would like to read it and let you know what I think..good work with the feeling in your words..
2006-10-07 13:04:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it but towards the end it kind of seemed a little desparate. And a little strong when talking about a 12 year old girl... a 12 year old girl shouldn't be talking about "hugging many boys" and "feeling the hardness of their chests" Other than that I like it. It's deep
2006-10-07 19:57:55 · answer #2 · answered by Some Girl 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your writing style is pretentious and sloppy. Your poem is too scattered and lacks organization & direction. It's as if I'm on a train heading for nowhere. A pre-schooler could write a poem better than yours.
2006-10-07 20:02:05 · answer #3 · answered by Avatar 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Bible has wonderful message of love.
In the Beginning God created heavens and earth.
God gives you air to breathe and sunshine to enjoy.
God gives you water to drink and food to eat.
God gives you a wonderful body and sound mind, to live.
God loves you, and you are precious to Him.
Son of God died on the Cross to save us from condemnation.
Jesus’ love is boundless and everlasting.
We have the hope of Heaven through Jesus.
Life therefore has fantastic and glorious future!
2006-10-07 20:10:32 · answer #4 · answered by tmthyh 4 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Did you write that? That is so beautiful. I write poetry. And, I've got to say that, that is so beautiful, whistful, and romantic. I hope you really feel that feeling of happiness in Love.
2006-10-07 19:57:54 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its sounds ok; but the message is full of mystery @ times I thought it was a child molester; looking for prey.
2006-10-07 20:16:56 · answer #6 · answered by Kim 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think....well if its a poem is very well writen if u wrote that cuz u think u have a mentel prob u dont cuz that was preaty good but if u think u got a probgo see a doctor
2006-10-07 19:57:35 · answer #7 · answered by graffiti.master 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cool poem. Is it about the yearn for love?
2006-10-07 21:16:05 · answer #8 · answered by catzrme 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it, very good. It's a good thing you can put your feelings down and make something creative and beautiful like that.
2006-10-07 19:57:06 · answer #9 · answered by cdlmeup4 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Deep. It is really good. Your a great writer!
2006-10-07 19:56:51 · answer #10 · answered by - 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋