WHOM SHOULD I COUNT ON
Friend?
My friend who was my identity,
Whom I trusted more than my family,
I stood by him when his days were blue,
He stabbed my back and proved me untrue,
I had selfish motives is what he has to say,
What ever I had he took all away,
Friend I am happy for you for all what you’ve gained,
But for how long will all that remain…………
Father?
I always turned to My Father though,
His answer to all my requests was no.
And I was left with no place to go.
I feel he didn’t have faith in me,
Perhaps this way it was destined to be,
I wash we could bridge the gaps with faith,
Oh! I’m unfortunate it’s far too late………………..
Brother?
My brother is young has his own life to see,
I don’t expect him to stand by me,
I wish he could think the way I do,
If only he cared the way I do,
Hey! Brother I know you expect a lot from me,
Keep faith! Soon fulfilled all expectations shall be…….
Sister?
My sister’s life is also gloomy,
She is going through her share of agony,
It hurts so much to realize,
She has stopped asking gifts from this brothers side,
Hey sister don’t loose hopes from me,
My love for you forever shall be,
Though phase of life is what I am going through,
Soon I will buy a lovely gift for you......
Relatives?
Relatives for whom I hardly care,
Still some are close to heart, precious and rare,
They feel shy to relate to me,
All they do is look down on me,
They will long to get a glimpse of me,
Because my tough times are not for ever to be………..
Grandfather?
My grandfather is my life,
And my life is becoming shorter each day.
I wish I could be there by his side,
To press his legs in his tired times.
He stood by me in all my ways,
He was father to me in my childhood days.
I’m so unfortunate to turn him down,
When this is my time to be counted on…………….
Grandmother.
My grandmother for whom I was life,
She took care of me throughout her life.
What affection what love it was,
I am fortunate to not have a mother,
Else I would be deprived of the love of a grandmother,
I promised ill gift her a gold chain,
Now my promise lingers in the memory lane.
I’m unfortunate that I lost her so soon,
Her life for me was the only boon.
Oh! Grandmother from the day you have stopped giving food,
Look at your grandson he is no good…………………..
2006-10-06 10:13:32 · 14 answers · asked by m9rocks 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
it was all very touching but the part that touched the most was the part of the father my father was never around and when he was he wasnt a father .. you done great keep up the great work
2006-10-11 14:26:26 · answer #1 · answered by just a mommy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Oh my gosh! Wow! Are kidding me, the whole thing is touching, I loved it, I could feel the emotion. It did touch my heart. I can't say the moment personally because my family and friends are good right now, but in any case, I loved it. Great write. Hugs. God Bless!
2006-10-06 10:23:36 · answer #2 · answered by Loved By Someone Above 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I thought this was beautiful :)
And for those who said it was too long? Well dang, you have the attention span of a rock. There's no such thing as a poem being too long. Maya Angelou's poems are long. So what? Ignorent people.
This was sweet and from the heart. You go girl! :D
2006-10-06 14:40:22 · answer #3 · answered by Mizzy 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
those who didn't read this, they totally missed out...big time...turning emotions into words (especially rhyming ones) is extremely difficult but you make it seem so easy, and you're so good at adding that extra tear in the middle....get it published!!! see, i write also but after my "sad moment" eventually gave way, i couldn't do it anymore...so, keep writing, because inspiration will fly away...at least it did for me...post some more, look up!! and you're absolutely wise to let words pour out your feelings. It helps, doesn't it? If you got more, write em, k? we should start a club or something, i dunno...hope to hear from you round soon....goodness, i liked your "friend" one.......
Well, have fun!!
(no seriously, we should start a club)
2006-10-06 11:04:54 · answer #4 · answered by heyheyhey 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋
It isn't great poetry but its honest and from the heart.
You are brave to lay yourself open in front of strangers like this.
Keep writing and all the best.
2006-10-06 13:11:59 · answer #5 · answered by 13caesars 4 · 4⤊ 0⤋
You're an excellent writer
2006-10-06 10:21:15 · answer #6 · answered by Love always, Kortnei 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Too long to read, break it down into shorter questions
2006-10-06 10:15:45 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Wow that is very nicely done. Great job
2006-10-06 10:22:24 · answer #8 · answered by beachgirl111982 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree too long to read
2006-10-06 10:20:54 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'm hoping you wrote this as a therapy exercise
2006-10-07 05:24:54 · answer #10 · answered by Bob 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋