i'm a chinese.Resently, I need to give a representation in class, i want sb to help me to check out if there is any mistake in the fllowing statement,and if possible, please change it , so it seem more like oral English. thanks a lot :
and Canute became the only ruler of England. Later ,his empire expanded quickly. It include England, Denmark , Norway and many other places. This was the most powerful empire in the Viking history.
Besides attacked the British isles, the Danes also invaded the continental Europe.
In 885 AD, the Danes invaded Paris. Although they couldn’t occupied Paris, they had forced the France king to admit their leader Rollos as the duke. And they also took control of a large terrority in Northern France. This area was called Nomandy. Later more and more Vikings settled here.
The Normandy duchy became more and more powerful. And in the year 1066, the leader of Normandy William, led his army to England.
2006-10-05 00:25:17 · 6 answers · asked by Scott F 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
Oh...alright then. I'm not very busy at the moment.
Besides ATTACKING..........
No need to say THE continental Europe
OCCUPY, not occupied
THEY FORCED THE FRENCH KING TO ACCEPT their leader
The leader of Normandy, William. ......
Well done. Good luck.
I hope you understand my corrections.
OK.................What have me and the other guy done to deserve a thumbs down? We both tried to help........is it because we didn't write it all out? Well, thanks, whoever it was.
2006-10-05 00:34:40 · answer #1 · answered by lou b 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I updated a few things. It is mainly the tense you are getting wrong other than that it looks good. I put the word change before any edits I made.
and Canute became the only ruler of England. Later ,his empire expanded quickly. It (changed) included England, Denmark , Norway and many other places. This was the most powerful empire in the Viking history.
Besides (changed) attacking the British isles, the Danes also invaded the continental Europe.
In 885 AD, the Danes invaded Paris. Although they couldn’t (Changed)occupy Paris, they had forced the (Change) king of France to admit their leader Rollos as the duke. (Change) They also took control of a large terrority in Northern France. This area was called Nomandy. Later more and more Vikings settled here.
The Normandy duchy became more and more powerful. And in the year 1066, the leader of Normandy William, led his army to England.
2006-10-05 00:36:08 · answer #2 · answered by Bopeep 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Isn't it the continuation of your former question, I did answer that one too.
and Canute became the only ruler of England. Later ,his empire expanded quickly. It included England, Denmark , Norway and many other places. This was the most powerful empire in the Viking history.
Besides attacking the British isles, the Danes also invaded the continental Europe.
In 885 AD, the Danes invaded Paris. Although they couldn’t occupied Paris, they had forced the France king to admit their leader Rollos as the duke. And they also took control of a large terrority in Northern France. This area was called Nomandy. Later more and more Vikings settled here.
The Normandy duchy became more and more powerful. And in the year 1066, the leader of Normandy William, led his army to England.
2006-10-05 00:34:52 · answer #3 · answered by sonali 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And Canute became the only ruler of England. Later ,his empire expanded quickly. It included England, Denmark , Norway and many other places. This was the most powerful empire in the Viking history.
Besides attacking the British isles, the Danes also invaded continental Europe.
In 885 AD, the Danes invaded Paris. Although they couldn’t occupy Paris, they had forced the French king to admit their leader Rollos as the duke. They also took control of a large terroritory in Northern France. This area was called Normandy. Later more and more Vikings settled here.
The Norman duke became more and more powerful. Then in the year 1066, the leader of Normandy, William, led his army to England.
2006-10-05 00:30:16 · answer #4 · answered by allblackskikass 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
my wife is chinese malay
it included england,denmark ,,,,,not include
powerfull empire in viking history ,,,not in the
besides attacking the british isles ,,,not attacked
also invaded the continent of europe ,,,,not continental
they could not occupy paris ,,,not occupied
they had forced the french king ...not france
they also took ,,,,and,, is kind of uneccessary
still known today as normandy and the nords continued to immigrate ,and colonize becoming more powerfull and attacked england in 1066
2006-10-05 00:47:04 · answer #5 · answered by txtx 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Change Besides attacked to Besides attacking, change Paris, they had forced to Paris, they forced. Also change the duke. And they to the duke. They also (remove the And.) Change the here after settled to there, and change the led his army to England to lead his army against England
2006-10-05 00:37:19 · answer #6 · answered by redhotboxsoxfan 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋