love is a sencation
caused by temptation
do you get my explenation
or do you need a better demonstration
when i take my location
and stick it in your destination
to increase the population
for the next generation
did you like my love demonstration
2006-10-02 15:00:09 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
methodology:
awful. forced rhythm and rhyme. bad grammar, no spelling or punctuation.
subject-matter:
hideous perversion of poetic license. elliptical plot. blatant sexual connotations. no romantic context.
summary:
this poem says: I'd like to erm... forcibly have sex with you, regardless of your emotions, in an unsafe fashion; but I can't be bothered to write a decent poem. I don't really love you at all...
I can't even be bothered to write a poem for you in proper couplets, so I just globbed together some poetry for you. here, would you like a rotten egg with that?
recommendations:
try for some nice free-verse.
it works better
get a life, a girl, some love, creativity and a change in subject matter
letter grade:
F-
cheerio
2006-10-02 15:03:29 · answer #1 · answered by The greatest and the best. 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A pome does not have to be about just something that sounds good i think u did good and u might come up with somthing more passionate. IT doesn't matter what someone saies about what u write as long as u like it that's all that matters.
2006-10-02 15:17:47 · answer #2 · answered by darkpirateprincess 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a ok poem but it try to use a spell check, there are quite a few mispelled words in there.
2006-10-02 15:04:40 · answer #3 · answered by Cecilia ♡ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
unhappy to assert, with no pattern to choose, my first effect is that maximum "poetry" belongs in a sock drawer someplace. Poetry is emotion crystallized after due mirrored photograph. it isn't the form you sense, however the form you may make the different individual respond. steer away from rhymes and cliches. cut back back on the words. provide it to somebody who's a poet and enable them to assist. after all, i'm particular you will provide it to her. the two particular that she will have the means to assert something banal, examine it as quickly as, tutor all her lady buddies... Pardon me, forget approximately approximately my skepticism. particular, deliver it to her yet first examine for suited spelling and punctuation
2016-10-01 21:09:55 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is horrible, terrible spelling, and tired old theme.
If you really want to be a poet, learn to spell and try to be original.
If you are just looking for attention, I guess you got a little of that!
2006-10-02 15:05:08 · answer #5 · answered by dagmar 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Learn to spell.
2006-10-02 15:02:38 · answer #6 · answered by Miss J 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Boy, you must be a high school drop out! Get over your sad, sorry little self!
2006-10-02 15:05:10 · answer #7 · answered by stormchildforever 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah i liked it i thought it was to the point and kinda funny in some way.
2006-10-02 15:03:45 · answer #8 · answered by Chi-Town wild 100's 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if you think this is in any way cute or will get you a girl YOU have a big problem....... TURN OFF big time...... now go to bed !!!! God bless
2006-10-02 15:03:28 · answer #9 · answered by Annie 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not at all
2006-10-02 15:02:25 · answer #10 · answered by Drea M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋