I Love You!!
Within your eyes I see my world.
I dont know why I feel this way.
I cant bare the thought of losing you.
Not now not, ever I love you.
I love the way you wisper in my ear
And the way you make me feel so safe
I love whenever you around
Just holding me so still
As I listten to sound of of your heart
Beating in my ear.
I never to let you go.
Youre my world, my everything.
And I love you, I always will.
2006-09-30 15:08:55 · 23 answers · asked by majorette13 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
This is one of my favorites!! <333
(most of my poems are sad)
2006-09-30 15:12:03 · update #1
Sorry!! I messed up my spelling alittle!! lol!!
2006-09-30 15:13:33 · update #2
Yes!! I wrote this poem I wrote it last year!!
2006-09-30 15:17:35 · update #3
Now, having the ability to read into things way too much, I see a lot of very deep feelings in this poem. It reminds me of a certain girl who I love with all of my heart. And, this just floods me with the happiest of memories that I've had with her. I love it.
2006-09-30 15:39:54 · answer #1 · answered by Zack D 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a really good start. I kinda like it, I used to write poems about love and crap too, so I think you did a wonderful job! It just needs some spell check, and you are set. I think that you should work a little bit more and you could really pull off the whole poet idea! But other than that, I thought you did pretty good.
2006-09-30 15:17:02 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a really good peom if u wrote it I think u should become a poet but yeah I write poems too..it's fun and it's a good way to get out u thoughts and feelings too...
2006-09-30 15:13:43 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Fair Needs some work here and there. Potential is there
2006-09-30 15:15:21 · answer #4 · answered by Sugar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW! That's really good! I hope no one steals this since you put it on the internet. :P
Just take my advice..don't save your poems on your computer! Because then it will crash, and you've lost everything! Happend to me, lesson learned. :P
2006-09-30 15:15:27 · answer #5 · answered by Mizzy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There are some grammatical errors . Overall, not very good. Sorry.
2006-09-30 15:15:24 · answer #6 · answered by swancath69 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good but you should do a spell check once in a while
2006-09-30 15:11:45 · answer #7 · answered by foeversexygirl 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
How old are you? You sound like my 13 year old sons girlfriend.
2006-09-30 15:27:23 · answer #8 · answered by living it 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds good really... but I am not an expert in poems though.
2006-09-30 15:14:11 · answer #9 · answered by truli u 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great but I would give it a little touch up though
2006-09-30 15:12:28 · answer #10 · answered by Roxxi 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋