i was thinking these group of friends go out to camp in the woods, and they see this cabin thats deserted and spooky. so they put up their tent and notices their is a hole in it and it started raining. so left with no choice they go into the cabin. its late and their all tierd so they lay down in the moldy beds. then outside the window one of the girls hear a tapping noise so she got up to check what it was. the rain is still falling and everything is blurred but their appears to be nothing there. she goes back in bed and 5 minutes later she hears the noise again so she goes back to the window to check. its blurred still so she goes to the door and opens it and goes outside. their she sees a shadow run into the trees, being brave she gathers a flashlight and follows it. then deep into the trees theres no sign of anything so she turns to go back, but she looks arounf and notices shes lost. then the trees rustle and a pack of wolves surround her and growl.do yu like it?it was a summary.
2006-09-28 14:33:12 · 11 answers · asked by [blahh] ™ 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
good begining, but the end has been done before in the interlopers by saki and your ending was different but i still did not like either yours or saki's endings, use spell check, make sure your using there right (but their appers to be nothing there- 1st their is there the second there is fine) (their all tired- change their to they're- they are) (their she sees a shadow- change their to there) how did the wolves tap the window last i checked its impossible- change to a creepy old guy who kidnapps her or something that can actually tap. why are they sleeping in a tent when there is a cabin right beside it??? i certanly would have just chosen the cabin instead of putting up the tent with all that labor. how many people, names, ages (age range), genders, if you change some/all of the things i mentioned it should be a pretty good story i was getting really into it until the end, make the cabin like a mile away and while they're heading back to their car they see it (but they didnt before) and they decide to make the most of the weekend and stay, have like a stream or something nearby because if your going to use the animal bit you need a common place they go everyday if you do that the wolves/animals would have a reason to attack, because they probably wouldnt attack out of the blue. i would love to read a detailed version of this. if you need any more help just add comments, because i check my previous answers often.
2006-09-28 14:45:53 · answer #1 · answered by Michelangelo 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You can ditch the hole in the tent idea as an excuse to get them into the cabin. Just have it belong to someone's family. It just seems like an extraneous detail. Even if the girl is brave I don't buy that she'd run off into the woods during a rainstorm at night because she saw a shadow. It's hard to tell from your summary. Does she have anything besides being brave, that would make us care whether she's in the woods with wolves? What about the friends? Are they necessary?
2006-09-28 21:50:53 · answer #2 · answered by answersBeta2.1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't think she is brave. I think she is as dumb as the ones in all those scary movies where when they hear a sound in the darkness they run right out and end up getting killed by whatever is out there.
2006-09-28 21:36:55 · answer #3 · answered by Rich Z 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really scarey until the wolves, try this.
She turns to go back, but she notices that she's lost then suddenly the trees rustle all around. "AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" she screams and she was gone.
Brings up the suspence and leaves a whole bunch of questions at the end.
2006-09-28 21:40:57 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
What happens after the wolves ambush her?
Sounds interesting so far.
2006-09-28 21:35:38 · answer #5 · answered by *babydoll* 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes! What fun to read your summary~~ she could be a"wolf whisperer" and end up befriending them and helping their living environment. Either way, now I am hooked, so you gotta send me the summary of where this goes please!
Stay with your journalism,trust your instincts, and GOOD LUCK !
2006-09-28 21:48:58 · answer #6 · answered by Lola 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
fly immediately to Hollywood
2006-09-28 21:36:00 · answer #7 · answered by guharamdas 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
thats a great starting point, i like it!
2006-09-28 21:35:46 · answer #8 · answered by ##$SoulStryker$## 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
actually...thats pretty good. good jobb
exs and ohs kaytiee
2006-09-28 21:36:05 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hmm... seems okay...
2006-09-28 21:35:25 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋