"i want you to tell me the truth, whats going on jenna?" said mum in anguish. !how many more times? , there is NOTHING going on, OMG don't look at me like that! why don't you believe me?" replied jenna angrily." ...because...i'm your mother, i know when something's wrong, please hiney just tell me..." "you don't get it do you? if you don't believe me then there's nothing either of us can do about it..." "really well guess what- you're grounded!" "OH NO I AM NOT" she bellowed and with that she ran out of the house slamming the front door behind her. she was long gone before her mum even had the chance to yell at her.
ok so thats the beggining of my english coursework story so er what can the story be about, what can the argument be about, i've got to hand this in tommorow and i just started writing i have no idea how to develop this story also can you tell me what you think of the story? ok thanks can you please try and be nice to me like only constructive criticism...thanks guys
2006-09-28 06:33:12 · 15 answers · asked by pritzy-fairy 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
oh yeh plz excuse the bad grammer but i was running out of space oh and the spellings..:)
2006-09-28 06:33:53 · update #1
OK, assuming you already know about the spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors...
argument could be about cheating at school
drugs in her pocket
cutting class
pregnant
changes in her mood due to bullying at school
lots of stuff -- use your own life (or your friends) and you'll come up with something great..... but write fast, since it's due tomorrow!
Good luck!
2006-09-28 06:37:29 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Do you have any novels in your home? Get hold of one and find a conversation. How is it set out? Compare it to yours and make the necessary changes.
If your teacher has to spend half his/her time trying to work out who's saying what, you'll lose marks. Spelling, grammar, punctuation and the correct use of words are just as important as a good storyline.
One word of advice, who are you going to focus on, the mother of the daughter? What are your characters thinking to make them behave the way they do.
Good luck as I would like to know why the mum thinks something is going on and why Jenna is so reluctant to confide in her mum.
2006-09-28 11:32:28 · answer #2 · answered by markspanishfly 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry. It's drivel. It's badly punctuated, lower and upper cases are all over the place and abbreviations like OMG have no place in a piece of English writing.
In terms of content, it's a start, but too early to say where the narrative is going. If you're going for a classic mother / daughter conflict, it's unimaginative and been done to death.
2006-09-28 06:40:43 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
that's a non secular "beginning," which skill turning out to be to be a sparkling individual. that's our cultural language game for signifying that this individual has replaced, and the ritual that is going with it (water baptism) symbolizes a 2d beginning. that's a public confirmation that this individual has been made form new. And snice we proceed to be sinners even after this occurs, we are being born back each and every of the time, as we admit our blunders and attempt to marvelous them and do greater desirable. we are consistently turning out to be to be new. the great factor approximately this metaphor is that no count how a procedures you have long gone down the different direction, no count how evil you have been, there is often desire in being made new.
2016-12-12 16:49:51 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
just answered a reoly to a girl about meddling on an ouiji board so maybe this mother has found one under her daughters bed and is angry that she is messing with something she doesn`t understand. all her friends are into it and she is just tagging along...maybe she could admit to her mum some of the evil messages they have received...wow...i could write horror films for a livin....
2006-09-28 06:38:14 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with Mr. Glenn, write from your own experiences. Have you had an argument with your mom or a friend? Develop from those.
good luck
2006-09-28 06:38:53 · answer #6 · answered by captn_carrot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too much speech try to use decriptive language and higher level adjectives rather than all that speech. As she looked at me I knew she was cross... I wasn't going to back down i was right, my blood boiled... things like that. Use lots of different connective too.
2006-09-28 06:52:58 · answer #7 · answered by tricia3uk 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm-- well I can see an arguement ensuing and a battle of will here, but I have no guess as to why they are arguing. It coudl be anything--
She could be taking drugs or she could have got herself pregnant and her mum wants her to admit it..
Ive no idea
2006-09-28 06:39:02 · answer #8 · answered by Scatty 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Remember to start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes. And yes, check your spelling and grammar.
2006-09-28 06:35:40 · answer #9 · answered by notyou311 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well i think it has a good beginning but it depends on the type of person you are....if u r sorta perverted, then you should go about tht she has a STD or bulimic or sumtin like tht...and if u r goody-good, then you should write about sumtin tht happened to you...neway...i hope tht helps, u r on ur way to a terrific story
hawaiigrl33
2006-09-28 06:39:24 · answer #10 · answered by hawaiigrl33 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋