Is someone kind enough to comment on this career statement included in my resume?

Question

Objective: I gained a lot experience working as a Consultant involved in both long term and short term processes, thus acquiring very useful skills in various fields. Now, I’m committed to contribute my skills through a management position in a large organization where I can value my proven experience and meet international professional standards.

please make changes as you feel and tell me if i doesn't frighten my potential employer

please make changes as you feel and tell me if i doesn't frighten my potential employer

Answer 1

In my experience, your objective should be clear and consise. The rest of your resume will speak of your experience. What kind of job would you like to have? For me to re-word (based on what you have here), I'd say something like this:

Objective: To obtain a management position in an orgainization <> that would best utilize my experience in developing both long and short term processes <> as well as my ability to <> as well as my desire to excel both personally and professionally.

Good luck!!

Answer 2

Objective: I gained a lot experience working as a Consultant involved in both long term and short term processes, thus acquiring very useful skills in various fields. Now, I’m committed to contribute my skills through a management position in a large organization where I can UTILIZE my experience and meet international professional standards.

Answer 3

I would recheck spelling and reword it like this: Objective: I've gained a lot of experience working as a Consultant which involves both long and short term processes, thus acquiring very useful skills in various fields. I'm now committed to contributing my skills through a management position in your large organization where the values of my proven experience can meet or exceed international professional standards.

Hope this helps!!!

Answer 4

Objective: I am committed to using my skills and experiences to meet international professional standards. I gained experience working as a consultant involving both long term and short term processes, thus acquiring skills in various fields.

Answer 5

You need to cut the filler words, What do you think of this? Just an idea:

I have gained experience as a consultant in long and short term processes acquiring skills in many fields. In a managerial position my skills and experience will benefit any organization through international professional standards.

Good luck...sounds really impressive.

Answer 6

Not good. I've read it 10 times, and I'm still not sure what you want, except that you are probably trying to make the transitioin from consulting to management.

Your objective should tell a recruiter/employer what you want, not blow your horn (the rest of your resume should do that - if they get that far). I'd stop reading after that "ojbective," assuming that you are too impressed with yourself or with being a consultant to understand how to handle the "real" world.

Better:

Entry level management position in [industry or profession].

OR - if you feel you are qualified - Management position in [industry or profession].

Change that objective depending on the actual position you are applying for - if it's a management position in a marketing organization, add "marketing" at the end; if it's a management position in a manufacturing organization, add "manufacturing" at the end.

Good luck!

Answer 7

It doesn't make any sense to me.

1) good grammer demands that you say "I'm committed to contributing" not "contribute".

2) What exactly does it mean to "value my proven experience and meet international professional standards?"

3) Your objective needs to tell the employeer what you are looking for and should be specifically written for the job you are applying for. This sounds very non-specific and vague as if you really don't know what you want and just strung a bunch of words together.

Answer 8

In my humble opinon, the Objective part of your resume is too wordy. Your objective to to get a job that utilizes your valuable skills and abilities. I've interned at a few national companies and one constant I've heard is that many resume's contain too much irrelevant information. Copy and paste your resume into a WORD page and do a grammar and spell check. The statement " where I can value my...." doesn't read right as well. You can explain things like your objective to the interviewer. Less is more.

Answer 9

I personally think this is a very well crafted "objective" statement; however, I would think about stopping my last sentence after the word "organization". Keeping your statements clean and crisp will give your employer more time to think about YOU and less to read.

Godloveya. and good luck

Answer 10

I agree with the other suggestions you've had so far and wish to add one more. Specify some of the useful skills that you've acquired.