PRIMROSE HILL
We do not speak
of that.
In this family we never open up
that hurt.
Let the mind contemplate the idea that I might have had a brother.
But we do not speak of that.
(we must always behave)
2006-09-28 00:34:42 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
You did well. I think if "you" like the poem then it is good. It is personal, emotional and sounds as if it may speak to others. This is all good. Keep doing it you may find others can really relate and perhaps it will be equitable in the long run for you in several ways.
2006-09-28 15:17:49 · answer #1 · answered by ck 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is not bad, I would change the last word but that is just my preference. Poetry's first requirement is to appeal to you, yourself and to be an outlet for personal emotions.
2006-09-30 22:30:51 · answer #2 · answered by rhymer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It gave me goose bumps... and if you knew me... you would realize how much of a big deal that is!
Very nice. I like.
2006-09-28 13:22:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its really good
2006-09-28 08:03:35 · answer #4 · answered by Rosie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow...now I'm sad
2006-09-28 07:41:50 · answer #5 · answered by Sandie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋