There is no title to this work, which stems from my worst nightmare I have awoken from. Please be honest.
Ah, a pain, so sharp, behold
Its source, my mark, black and bold.
Third of marks by pen instilled,
My body, with Hellish fury filled.
My hands ravaged with disdain
Seeking to gain hold of the pain.
My hands feel no skin held fast
But rather wounds large and vast.
Alone, my eyes see the odd sight,
My hands hold an oozing dark blight.
Imagine for yourself (if you be bold),
What my hands held, what they still hold.
Feel the loose flesh in your hands
Congealing in the inked bands
Where tattoos once were, nevermore
For cursed now, marks become sores.
Open wounds, festering disgust,
What means this decaying lust?
You who gather round, unknown
Dost thou enjoy this ill sewn?
Why does the world stand still
Gazing at the lone man ill?
Salvation, I alone must find,
Lest plague hinder my flesh and mind.
Here the cursed omen halts,
Shut within an awakened vault.
2006-09-25 23:32:27 · 7 answers · asked by silenceheldstill 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Due to space constraints, I must add that if you can think of a title, I would like to hear it. I hate untitled work. Also, enjoy.
2006-09-25 23:34:34 · update #1
Its good and dark, dark, dark...
Can I suggest "Into the Crucible" or “Born of the Crucible” by Silence Held Still
2006-09-26 07:05:05 · answer #1 · answered by Ralph 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is quite good. You have a format there. Some of the words are a bit out of place, it seems half new world, half old world, wandering into the land of Poe and out again.
Don't let other's judge you, you know how you feel about this work. I don't know of any title you might use other than Tattoo.
2006-09-26 13:28:23 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i'm unable to believe that they might say that the Jews suffered the Holocaust through fact they did not believe in the "Lord's way!" it somewhat is ill! Then they mentioned that God rains wrath on people's heads in the event that they don't believe the way they are announcing they must. i assume that 9/11 explosion that killed such a lot of people became into purely God being wrathful. i assume the Oklahoma explosion became into purely God being wrathful, exceedingly to all those little sinning toddlers. I used to call myself Christian, yet i think of i'm changing my innovations. The extra I hear of those idiots, the extra i want to stay removed from any so talked approximately as homestead of Worship. ought to be homestead of Horrors!
2016-12-15 14:30:34 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Grotesque.And very good,gave me cold chills reading it.Very dark an tortured soul. Going through inner hell,all come to mind ,while reading this.I'm not good at thinking of titles,but these words describe what this reminds me of.
2006-09-26 05:23:27 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think the title should be "Fun times in Happy Land".
Just kidding, I thought it was pretty good.....real dark
2006-09-26 00:03:15 · answer #5 · answered by Richo Fev 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Young and Dark
2006-09-25 23:44:22 · answer #6 · answered by peppermint_paddy 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How about "Removing a Tattoo"?
2006-09-26 02:56:25 · answer #7 · answered by auntb93again 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋