I'm sure you realize that the scholarship is very important to me, both financially and personally, as it reflects my hard work and dedication toward earning my degree at this university.
2006-09-25 10:46:01 · 16 answers · asked by wash_yer_nuts 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
It is definately not a run-on. Two different thoughts are NOT combined in the same sentence.
2006-09-25 11:02:47 · update #1
it's "towards"
2006-09-25 10:54:02 · answer #1 · answered by misanthrop 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is how I would change it, were it grammatically incorrect:
I'm sure you realize the scholarship is very important to me, financially as well as personally. It reflects my hard work and dedication toward earning the degree of this university.
2006-09-25 21:36:35 · answer #2 · answered by ca_christopher1965 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No because it sounds as though you demand someone to realize something...just state "this scholarship is very important to me both financially and personally. It shows my hard work and dedication toward earning my degree at (name of university).
2006-09-25 17:56:37 · answer #3 · answered by proud of it 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Please realize that this scholarship is very much important to me, both financially and personally; as it reflects my hard work and dedication towards earning my degree at this university.
2006-09-25 18:26:37 · answer #4 · answered by Jalena 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Never assume anything! Always leave out "very."
This scholarship is a direct reflection of my hard work and dedication to my future and I look forward to applying myself academically at (state entire name of University- capitalize first letter of whole name) with confidence that I will contribute not only to the school on an academic level, but also by being a positive role model to society.
Try to make it sound personal instead of telling them it is personal. Good luck.. never state the obvious.
2006-09-25 18:09:12 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 4⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is correct, it just doesn't sound right.
The ___ Scholarship is very important to me, both financially and personally, as it reflects my hard work and dedication toward earning my ____ degree at ____ University.
2006-09-25 18:46:33 · answer #6 · answered by Mee 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I would leave out the "I'm sure you realize" part and just say "This scholarship is very important to me.... ".
2006-09-25 17:54:05 · answer #7 · answered by *Cara* 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
dedication TO not dedication toward
Also "personally" sounds odd, although I wouldn't say it's wrong, but it's not really parallel to "financially". "Emotionally" might work better.
2006-09-25 18:51:57 · answer #8 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
um it's okay but take out the words (that the) at the begining and put (this) remove the comma after me delete the word both and it'll be better
2006-09-25 17:56:24 · answer #9 · answered by Claudia 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
yes
2006-09-25 17:49:10 · answer #10 · answered by haha_MEHELPU_maybe 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋