Who lost the love for the god above and betrayed the name of Jesus when all he ever did was teach holiness.
For if you think the answers Judas then your wrong, it was you, the one who denied him three times before the rooster crowed.
For if you think the answers Peter, your wrong again, its you.The men who hung him on the cross, and jabbed him in the side.
For if you think it was the Jews then you are yet and still wrong, for the killer wasn't even you but it was me.
Yes, Oh Lord I admit this to you, I sat on the side and I watched you die and I witnessed your pain and i didnt even cry.
Me, oh lord, Me I was the one who's sins you died for and I was afraid to admit it but god as I stand before you on this judgement day unto you lord I pray
It was me oh lord, me and for that very reason i owe you dear Lord an apology so here it goes lord,
I am sorry.
2006-09-24 12:19:30 · 17 answers · asked by dre 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
Your poem is beautiful. It reflects on how the world has forgotten what God our savior has done for us. I rate you a definite A. Keep up the great work!
Sincerely yours,
MArgret Diana Li Diaz Fley
2006-09-24 12:29:28 · answer #1 · answered by diana li 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For a creative writing class I would give you a A, but if this is for a english class than it would be a B. Lord and God both need to be capitlized. It's dissrespectfull not to cap those two words.
2006-09-24 12:32:04 · answer #2 · answered by ladybutterfly4u 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is your poem, your writing, your thoughts, your expression. That I cannot grade.
Reading your poem objectively, I would grade it B. If I may offer constructive criticism, check your punctuation and capitalization. Just needs a little polishing up.
2006-09-24 13:42:28 · answer #3 · answered by dudette 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll give a "B+". The poem has good meaning, but there's a few bugs that need to be taken out. Perfect it a little.
2006-09-24 12:33:39 · answer #4 · answered by tidy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I believe your sincerity is genuine but you don't write very well. Save this poem for a Sunday school class. It will impress the children and make you feel good.
2006-09-24 12:31:28 · answer #5 · answered by juncogirl3 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
You need to ask forgiveness for writing that. It sux worse than the devil.
2006-09-24 12:21:15 · answer #6 · answered by greeneyedprincess 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
B+
2006-09-24 12:24:58 · answer #7 · answered by Beast from the East 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give you a B...only because it makes me feel like a terrible person. :(
sad but pretty
2006-09-24 12:28:32 · answer #8 · answered by Krn 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very sincere. I feel the same way.
2006-09-24 12:25:53 · answer #9 · answered by tea cup 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ok I think that it and you deserve a B+.Well done, I like it.
2006-09-24 12:32:03 · answer #10 · answered by mojoe_girl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋