Lost in darkness,my heart feels empty and bare.As i slowly call for someone to listen.My soul is screaming in pain for love.My heart feels so empty.As evening progresses to day and day turns back to night.But still my soul screams.My heart feels like it can not be loved.Yet my outer core is not a wreck.My face will never be someones pain.But still my heart feels it can not be loved.My soul still screams in pain.For a womans soft touch,a pretty smile.But I still enter each day and night.Waiting,hoping to someday find my true love.
What do you think.Have you found your true love.
2006-09-23 19:33:19 · 17 answers · asked by lovely soul with insite 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I love the poem, but I like you more...
2006-09-25 18:38:45 · answer #1 · answered by AAP0305 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
In a critical analysis of your poem, I would say it is very good. It clearly expresses the emotions you feel and what you have been going through. The only negative towards it is you use the word "screaming" or "scream" too much. It would be better to find another word instead of repeating the same one over and over again.
As for love, it takes time. We all know this. I was single for a few years, dating on and off with different people until I found someone I truly cared about and I was attracted too. Not just physically but mentally and emotionally as well. Love is something that takes a great deal of time and if you are willing to search for it and be open to it, then I think you will do just fine.
2006-09-23 19:37:45 · answer #2 · answered by Lord Draven 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this poem is sad, it tells of someone thatscrying out to feel love. Makes you want to hold the author in you arms and hold them and make all the darkness disapear and turn there dark to light.
I would say hold your head high in this world, let the light shine from your eyes they are the window to your soul, once a woman looks deep into your eyes she will be lost forever just smile and someone will come make your darkness shine.
2006-09-23 19:44:48 · answer #3 · answered by foxymoma 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-12-18 15:54:27 · answer #4 · answered by maffia 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You sound lonely and lost. You do not need anyone out there to validate you. You don't even have to have someone love you in order to love yourself. Just get some hobbies, develop your god-given skills, exploit the resources at your disposal and be the best YOU that you can be. People will begin to appreciate who you are as your personality develops----and soon you will find someone who will love you and smile especially for you and be that someone special for whom you have been searching. Go do it!
2006-09-23 19:39:29 · answer #5 · answered by itsmehuh 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did you just compose that???
Super!!! You can really place your feelings into writing. If all your poems are original,why not compile all your poems and send it to a publishing company? or give it to the one whom you love? She would definitely melt with your sweetness.
I understand that not everyone is good in expressing their emotions through writing, but you have that gift and you should cultivate it.
Painful as it seems, I have loved and lost.
2006-09-23 19:44:54 · answer #6 · answered by yunesa 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its really sad, U seem really lonely and deppresed...... But U will find someone that loves U just the way U are. All In Good Time!!
2006-09-23 19:58:07 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
first of all, if you're lost in the darkness, then you should always bring a flashlight with you all the time.
and if you're heart is empty, u need to keep pumping it with blood you know..
and if you're soul is screaming in pain. put some painkillers on it.
that's what i think.
2006-09-23 19:58:12 · answer #8 · answered by whatever_dude™ 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm thinking you might want to work on that a bit. But we all have different likes and dislikes. Best wishes to you.
2006-09-23 19:36:21 · answer #9 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is great poem and yes i have found my true love we have been happily married for 2 years
2006-09-23 19:36:07 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋