Your hair looks so healthy and smells so nice,
have you had any luck getting rid of the lice?
Your eyes sparkle like the stars in the sky,
how long have you had the one glass eye?
Your lips taste just like cherry wine,
they should, you drink it all the time.
Your breasts are as firm as they can be,
too bad they're only a 28 C.
Your hips are soft, supple, and pale,
But i've seen less blubber on a whale.
Your feet are small and dainty and pink,
put your shoes back on, they're starting to stink.
And in case you are thinking that we should date,
I'd rather be the victim of a prison rape.
2006-09-22 17:12:18 · 17 answers · asked by opjames 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
Btw, I'm not "angry" at anyone. I just thought it would be funny to give a compliment followed by an insult.
2006-09-22 17:49:25 · update #1
hahah pretty creative, don't want to meet your inspiration for that piece, but great job.
2006-09-22 18:26:42 · answer #1 · answered by Link 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The cadence is a bit off, and the main themes are not well tied together. Obviously this reads like something aimed to get back at someone even if it's meant as a joke. I would try to cut a few words out so that the meter is sharper and carries more impact. Connect each sentence as a story that ends with your very powerful last line, then I think you have really sent the message home.
2006-09-23 00:16:36 · answer #2 · answered by mntr2day 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I've never seen a Purple Cow,
I never hope to see one.
But, I can tell you anyhow,
I'd rather SEE than BE one!
2006-09-23 00:18:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Quite humorous Couplets - maybe you should turn them into Limericks.
2006-09-23 00:21:59 · answer #4 · answered by Lee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad for a first attemt, I suppose, keep at it maybe one day you will get it right
2006-09-23 00:20:33 · answer #5 · answered by Pete 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
there are two types of poetry
Verse and like yours "WORSE "
Don't give up your day job
2006-09-23 15:27:13 · answer #6 · answered by browneyed 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
So much anger inside you have.
2006-09-23 00:21:24 · answer #7 · answered by TXBLKGRL 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its weird
2006-09-23 00:13:47 · answer #8 · answered by Sammi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ummmmmm yep
2006-09-23 01:14:36 · answer #9 · answered by BLW 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you really love the person who was your muse for that one, dont you?
2006-09-23 00:15:57 · answer #10 · answered by someone s 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋