I sang for you
That night of stars
I felt your arms around me
And your lips on mine
Dark skin against light
And I sang you the song
The song that made this
All this
Everything ever made
All things past
And all things to come
I sang for you
I put into words
What has never been put into words
And never will be again
And I gave it to you
I gave it all to you
Not for borrowing
But for keeps
And I know
That when the night is over
Youll be gone
And Ill still be here
And never shall I leave
I will wait for you
Till the end of time
And then some
And I will never leave that spot
Or stop thinking of you
Ill see your face
And call your name in my sleep
And feel you in my dreams
Ill know you
Ill be there
Youll never see me
And ill never see you
But always ill be at your side
And I know
You will forget me
You will move along
But till the dawn is over
Here we will stay
You and me
And our souls will imprint upon each other
Ill see your face in my mind
2006-09-21 05:56:23 · 8 answers · asked by Colin Night 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
every night of my life
And even after I die
I know you will be there
And so will I
And I will see you and smile
I sang you a song
A song that never ends
Even when there is nothing left to be sung
And when the night is over
Youll be gone
And this night will be a dream
And if I try to touch it
It will burst and leave me
Stranded and on my own
As I was before you found me
And so here I stand
Looking over you
And when you are gone
Ill simply whisper goodbye
And the thought of you will never die
As I lie
Upon the grounds of time
2006-09-21 05:56:44 · update #1
... boring
2006-09-21 06:04:06 · answer #1 · answered by William G 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It's a very nice poem, I like it! It's just a bit too long. I like the way it starts with love... Felt a bit sad, it's like you want to reach someone but can't. (Poems don't always need to be happy.) Great work!
2006-09-21 06:11:37 · answer #2 · answered by Anna-Lisa 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I found it hard to follow your feeling and direction. Perhaps it needs rhythym to keep the flow going. Don't give up,, I think you have something here.
Good luck!
2006-09-21 06:11:43 · answer #3 · answered by chunkydunk 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't listen to them. I liked it. It sounds very romantic and I believe you really put a lot of thought into it. Great going! I'm proud of you! :-)
2006-09-21 06:24:34 · answer #4 · answered by son-shine 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Some parts were good but for the most part...you lost me...give me something to keep my attention
2006-09-21 06:01:44 · answer #5 · answered by udcampusconcierge 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, but its quite childish
2006-09-21 06:12:38 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that totally rocks! good job i wish i could do that
2006-09-21 06:48:19 · answer #7 · answered by launchpad 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I DON'T KNOW WHAT THEY THINK...BUT YOU CAN WORK ON THAT!
Write, write new thoughts...i think you have a gift...use it!
2006-09-21 06:13:31 · answer #8 · answered by liveasahb 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋