Correction to be made in this memo?

Question

Subject: Request for Man power – One Office boy


Please be requested that to provide an office boy, for the reason that, Now-a-days a vast number of accommodation items are procured and hence, we are now facing problems while loading, unloading and delivering the items such as, House hold materials in the accommodation (Bed & mattress, chairs, Gas cylinders, Crockery Items) and office related materials.

Therefore, I request you to kindly provide an office boy, one who has manifold skills and efficient.

For your Information and approval Please,


Thanks and regards,


Manager

Answer 1

Subject: Request for man power - one office boy.



Requesting you to provide an office boy; due to the reason that , in recent days, a vast number of accomodation items have been procured and hence, we are now facing a lot of problems in loading and delivering many items such as house hold materials such as beds, mattresses, chairs, gas cylinders and crockery items etc. and also office related materials.

Therefore, I request you to kindly provide an office boy who has manifold skills and is efficient in work.

Waiting in anticipation for response and approval.

Thanking you,
Regards,

Manager

Answer 2

Subject: Request for Man power – One Office boy

Now-a-days we are procuring a vast number of accommodation items such as House hold materials in the accommodation (Bed & mattress, chairs, Gas cylinders, Crockery Items) and office related materials. We need to load, unload and deliver these items and are facing problems in doing these activities.

Therefore, I request you to kindly provide an office boy, one who has manifold skills and is efficient.

For your Information and approval please,

Thanks and regards,

Manager

Answer 3

Lots of corrections are needed in this memo. You might need to include if the position will be permanent or temporary. If temporary, include the approximate time frame the person will be needed. Try something like this.

Subject: Request for additional Stock boy

Due to the vast number of accommodations items recently procured, my department is in need of additional personnel. The new employee's duties would include loading, unloading and delivering items such as: bed frames, mattresses, chairs, Gas cylinders, and various other crockery and household items, in addition to related office materials. The ability to work efficiently and follow directions is a must.

Therefore, I request your approval to hire a Stock boy.

Thank you for your time in this matter,

Manager

Answer 4

I would not use the term "now-a-days." I would use, "presently, or "in recent days." The first paragrah needs some periods. It seems like a run-on sentence. I would end it "For your review and approval,"

Hope this helps.

Answer 5

Oh boy, that was a confusing memo.... As hard as I tried, I can't make out anything out of that to make it work. I'm not an expert in office memos, and this is just too confusing a memo to correct....

Answer 6

Sorry no office boy. Office boys are for office. Stock boy. You want STOCK boy?

Answer 7

I really would like to help you, but I don't know what you're talking about here. Have you been using one of those Internet translation engines, believe me, they are incomprehensible!!

Answer 8

that is great