A Child Suffers
A child sits cross-legged on the floor
He looks up and watches his mother and father argue
He watches his father hit his mother
and his mother throw a lamp
Missing by inches his fathers face
The child gets up without a sound, and walks silently to his room
Bowing on his knees........
"Please Father make the anger stop and for the love to return"
The Child stands and leaves his room
Returning to where the shouting began
He sits back down cross-legged on the floor
Waiting for the miracle that will never come
The child grows and every night he prays to God....
"Please stop the fighting and let the love begin"
Till one day he realizes God doesn't exsist
His pain exceeding coping ability...
A body on the floor, a smoking gun in hand....
The suffering has come to an end.
2006-09-15 19:40:02 · 17 answers · asked by Z ten 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
A friend gave it to me, but i have no clue where she got it...
2006-09-15 19:52:00 · update #1
For some reason, people are seeing it fit to tear you to pieces for posting this poem. That's not nice.
Did you write this? If so, I have some things to say to you personally. If you didn't write it, there's no use saying them. So, if you care to post additional details and let me know the poem's author, that would be great.
2006-09-15 19:48:03 · answer #1 · answered by Gestalt 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
truthfully coming from a professional poet, it sounds slightly compelled. Do you think of this is compelled? relatively this is an extremely good first attempt. you have the skill to place your thoughts obtainable. yet is does have stretched throughout it. you in user-friendly terms ought to enable the words flow. do no longer make something come out. in case you do it is going to look like a pen exploded throughout your internet site. and ... EDIT EDIT EDIT my expensive. the main to a competent poem is distinctive copies.
2016-12-18 11:10:12 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You write well. Creative people do great work in their darkest moments. Ask yourself what does God want me to learn from this? The Higher Power can come through you to manifest its creative work. Be open to it.
2006-09-15 20:29:34 · answer #3 · answered by cats/eyes 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I would say that it is sad and tragic, although it sounds as though it has hints of things that might have happened in reality.
2006-09-15 21:30:55 · answer #4 · answered by burnt_crispy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very sad but also a reality that many children must face. There is no god to come to their rescue.If you polish it up a little bit it would be great.
2006-09-15 19:45:56 · answer #5 · answered by ... 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
the childs suffering has just begun. the only change we can make is in our perception of the world.
2006-09-15 19:52:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
did you write that?
well God does exsist. i think it makes no sense. ever poem people write is about this stuff and they all try. but some don't quite success as others do.
practice more if that was written by you. write about a unique topic that people don't write about. : ]
2006-09-15 19:44:11 · answer #7 · answered by gerardsgrl101 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
So sad and so poignant. If only his parents had realized the harm that they were causing.
2006-09-15 19:47:17 · answer #8 · answered by Debra M. Wishing Peace To All 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
mind if i ask you something is this your personal view of world
as a poem it lacks something....like..... theres no transition between lines...
but i think you have good imagination and you should try your skills in writing stories
2006-09-15 19:51:10 · answer #9 · answered by sherry 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it not right it wrong first take u to mark 11chapter 23v u got believe it happen before it gone happen u don't wait see it happen u got believe have happen and it will
2006-09-15 19:50:10 · answer #10 · answered by rnd1938 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋