it was just a regular day at school
i was walking down across my classes
then i stopped
and i looked up
you wanna know what i saw?
i saw you
i stared into your eyes and then back at the ground
i had never seen so beautiful
the next day
i looked for you in the hallway
and then i found out
you were in all my classes
i would doze off
and look at you
but you wouldnt
you were too busy writing down your homwork
i remember one time you cheated on your test
and got in so much trouble
but i loved you
and took all the blame
and since then you were my freind
everything was perfect
and then one day
you messed everything up
i asked you, so do you like me
and you said no
but i knew you really ment yes
so we never talked since then
its been 3 years now
and i just thought of you
and maybe thats why i wrote this poem
and maybe you will read it someday
i wanted to say: how are you
where are you?
do you remember me?
cuz i still remember you...
2006-09-15 15:44:26 · 13 answers · asked by sad but cute 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
this was made for my freind, chris gill
2006-09-15 15:49:23 · update #1
very sweet and innocent.
hope he still remembers you too
2006-09-15 15:46:34 · answer #1 · answered by askaway 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
You should read that with guitar in the background like a Jewel song.. or piano like Michelle Branch. You may be on to something sisuh... In a world of reality T.V. we want reality music as well... Look at John Mayer, he made a career out of it... good luck
2006-09-15 23:02:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
REGULAR DAY AT SCHOOL (Cause I remember you)
DAY ONE:
a regular day at school; predictable, forgettable,
i walked the line (between classes),
stopped short.
looked up...
AWESTRUCK!
In your eyes, then back to the ground,
nothing so beautiful than you coming around,
lifting me up, and tugging my soul,
out of the drudge of an every same day.
DAY TWO:
dizzy in the hallway, can't seem to clear my head,
thought of you dance, as my longing goes unfed,
what least should I expect but to wonder my situation,
yet there you pass me in the hall, and my heart stops.
(full throttle)
DAY THREE:
In math class I fade (it was never my subject),
I doze in a haze lukewarm of you,
yet you can't notice,
too absorbed in homework.
DAY FOUR:
You cheated.
I took blame.
I admired you for that.
But you still didn't stand.
DAY FIVE:
I pulled out the courage to finally embarke,
"Do you really care for me?"
"NO."
(stern, cold)
(3 years later)
(visions of you)
(was it the prose I wrote...
hoping you'd read it?)
I still wait.......
(have you)
2006-09-15 23:00:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is an odd poem. It drips with personal experience, which adds character to a poem. Make sure when you write a poem, that you don't ramble, and it's not like you're just talking. Make a point, and capture your reader with what you're telling them. Good poem, though.
2006-09-15 22:47:09 · answer #4 · answered by answerchik 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You seem to be a most wonderful lady, and it hurts when you are let down. Look aroung more carefully. There are more beautiful people that you realize. Look around, darling. They are everywhere. Good Luck and don't hang on so long.
2006-09-15 22:48:55 · answer #5 · answered by iamholiday333 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Interesting. Who's it for?
2006-09-15 22:48:23 · answer #6 · answered by HelpfulHanna 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Same words repeated over and over, for example and, i, etc. Ok poem
2006-09-15 22:56:04 · answer #7 · answered by jassygirl00 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's nice, I didn't even take the time to look at it or read it.
2006-09-15 22:45:50 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
-yeah i liked it sad but cute no pun intended
2006-09-15 22:48:15 · answer #9 · answered by chloe dog 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it's a good one
2006-09-15 22:53:25 · answer #10 · answered by Giggles 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋