Everyday, when I wake up, I think of you.
You are my angel.
You are my godess, but most importantly you are mine.
You are the one whos every word relaxes me, every move amazes me, and the one I have know all my life, but only just met.
You are the one whos beauty is envied by the stars.
The one whos love is wanted by all men, but over time only a lucky few deserve.
i wrote it, and i want to know what you girls think. Comment on it, make changes, whatever.
2006-09-14 16:29:14 · 17 answers · asked by The Question Man 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I wanted to thank all you girls for responding, i'm a guy so im not a poem witer, i couldnt fall asleep one night and i though of this....i want to thank you for all of you changes and help....And yea for those who think im desperate and obsessed, fine you are probally right...And let me add devoted, smarter than you, and have been waiting two years for the right time to ask her out...So desparate, for her yes. Obsessed over her yes...you were right about controlling it does sound controlling, but im not...
2006-09-14 16:51:37 · update #1
it's a really nice and sweet poem! any girl's heart will melt when she read's what you've wrote! :).
except there is one thing, "my godess" is a bit much. how about trying you are in my heart and soul? i don't know something a bit lighter than the word godess.
alternative ending: everday before i go to sleep, i wish upon a star that you'll always be in my heart, no matter if you're near or far.
btw most "importantly you are mines?" how about you try reversing that and put but what i'm really trying to say is that i am yours.
2006-09-14 16:35:52 · answer #1 · answered by sugar n' spice 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, it's the thought that counts but what about the sex appeal and plus your laying it on too thick.
Try this:
Girl, your every move makes me feel like no other
From the top of your head to the soles of your feet
makes me yearn for you more and more each day
when you look up, you will see me
for i can not help but to stare
you may try to resist but i can not let you
for you have me on a leash that could never be untied
your smell, your lips, make my nature rise to the heavens and blue skies
Girl, my temptation for you grows stronger everyday
love me and i will hold you
and together no one will put asunder
for my love with you is true
for you must be with me and i with you
2006-09-14 16:44:37 · answer #2 · answered by ArDene'e 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its kinda good
what do u think of this poem?
Many times I dream about you
But none can replace a moment spent with you
Though every night I talk to you
I'd give everything to feel your embrace
And so before I close my eyes
I wish to see you on my dream tonight
And before I see the morning light
I hope you'll be there to hold me tight!
Or this poem?
I loved you yesterday
I love you today
I'll love you tomorow, in every way
i hope in my heart, u'll always stay
you make me happy
you make me smile
every moment with u, is so worth while
without you with me
i wouldnt survive
ur the one thng that keeps me alive
dont break my heart
stay by my side
i miss u the most when we say goodbye
you were my first love
your my only today
the way you smile blows me away
when i think of you, my heart skips a beat
so stay with me now
forever and more
for without u baby i'd be no more
2006-09-14 16:36:56 · answer #3 · answered by Your best friend 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's sweet and deep. I means a lot to us girls when a guy writes poems for us, it says something about u to do this
Im sure she will like it if not then she's may be missing out on a wonderful guy who will write poems.
So give it to her but do it at the right time
Good Luck
2006-09-14 16:36:26 · answer #4 · answered by itspink22@sbcglobal.net 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is really good This is my Pome...
I Am Me
“What kind of person are you,”
Everyone asked while looking at me
like a cat staring down its prey.
I’m the kind of person
That can’t be categorized
As a loud
African American,
Fast talking Mexican,
or under educated
Hispanic.
I’m the kind of person
that is not what
you call me,
I’m only what I answer to.
All I can say is
That I am me.
I am my traditions
of opening one present
on Christmas eve.
I am my style
of countless jeans and t-shirts.
I am my talents
Of singing and cooking.
And …
Only what I say
I am.
2006-09-14 16:32:16 · answer #5 · answered by Everyone and No One 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
check this one out!
love is......
love is the greatest feeling,
love is like a play,
love is what i feel for you each day.
love is like a smile,
love is like a song,
love is a great emotion,
that keeps us going strong.
i love you with all my heart,
my body and soul.
i love the way i keep loving,
like a love i cant control,
so remember when your eyes meet mine,
i love you with all my heart,
and i have poured my entire soul into you,
right from the very start!
2006-09-14 16:48:46 · answer #6 · answered by kaylee 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Dude, that makes you sound so desperate, controlling and obsessed.
"You are my godess, but most importantly you are mine."
Yeah, ummm *runs away*
2006-09-14 16:32:06 · answer #7 · answered by Rivrav 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think thats super sweet. Have u gave it to her yet? I bet youll get a few tears for that one.
2006-09-14 16:32:17 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think it's lovely. it's very sweet that you're doing this for her. not a lot of guys do. there should be more like you. hope it works out.
2006-09-14 16:33:46 · answer #9 · answered by straitjacket feeling 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very neat poem.
2006-09-14 16:43:11 · answer #10 · answered by Symbolic User 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋