Are We Happy With Who We Are? another poem! thanks you for reading my first one guys. :)?

Question

btw i am 16, and i have more poems that i would like to share if you guys don't mind. i have nobody else to show them to :(

Are We Happy With Who We Are?

I wonder every day
What happened to us all?
We are living in a box
Our homes, the car, and mall

People stressed from work
While children hate their lives
There is nowhere we can run
So they go before 16 arrives

Money is our world
And how to make them more
Teens are suiciding every day
While we continue to ignore

We try so hard to run
In the music we see escape
With the twisted truth they sing
While we try to change our shape

We live inside illusion
With the happy games and shows
So I come to one conclusion
They’ll never let the truth expose

And I fight back everyday
Trying to break free
With this fake world we have now
I f**king don't agree

So help me with this mission
I feel this task is mine
To change this sh!t for good
And a new world, we shall design

Answer 1

Hello. This is a masterpiece. This poem shows how I sometimes feel inside without telling anyone. Thank you for writing it. It shows hope for the world because some people still have a creative mind.

I have a new renewed hope for this country now. If you have no one else to share these poems with you can send them to me whenever you like.

Have a great & wonderful day.

Answer 2

I really love you poem,so pleased with what I read.
These children really need some help,before there worlds dead.
They need to learn an out,to bring value to their lives.
Maybe writing poems,stories,or a journal that doesn't rhyme.
But escape is good for a moment,But it will not stop their future.
Only belief in God,with a little help from mother nature.
But keep up the with all your writing,I see many books within your words.
That's the answer to all the worlds questions,Good words put on this Earth.

Will Bitmore Scram
Lovelysoul

Answer 3

Finally a person contributes here with love and sweet jester..

passages kinda short, and mostly only rhymed at the end of sentences..

keep up the good work and thanks for the 2 points..

peace

Answer 4

I totally agree. It's a sad fact but we can do something.