hi! tell me what you think. i wrote this one day after a class discusion.
Children go to bed
Every night without a bite
Many of them starve to death
Everyday they get up and fight
In Africa the kids
They would love to go to school
If they had building or a book
The world there can be so cruel
In the Middle East
People lie awake at night
Listening to the deadly bombs
Hoping that they'll survive tonight
In Baghdad these times are scary
People being slaughtered in their cars
With the bombs and all the rockets
Will forever leave the burning scars
While back into the US
A child is suffering from cancer
Too bad his mom can't make it much around
Cause of the 3 jobs, being with no answer
In a different city once again
A woman on the street she lies
Watching all the people by
While she slowly sits there and dies
So now I have a question
A simple that question that cuts like knife
Please, ask yourself the same thing
"How dare I complain about my life?"
2006-09-13 15:20:18 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
You are compassionate
I am glad you have heart my sister
because I know you are one in a crowded
world who is making a difference in someone's life
You are destined do you know that
you will do great things in Jesus name
2006-09-13 15:25:02 · answer #1 · answered by Queen A 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, especially the ending and the way you led up to it. You are but a proofread, and a few punctuation marks away from a well expressed, unique, challenging, and polished piece.
2006-09-13 22:26:16 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
What you are trying to tell people is that they should treasure their lives.
Stop complaining about life sucks there are more people out there who would love any time take your place.
May God bless you.
2006-09-13 22:30:50 · answer #3 · answered by Rod 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a nice poem but only in certain parts of africa (very few places) there isnt a place for the children to go to school
2006-09-13 22:32:54 · answer #4 · answered by latoya j 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THAT IS A NICE POEM AND I ENJOYED READING IT ALSO THIS POEM IS VERY TRUE BECAUSE ALOT OF PEOPLE DOES NOT REALIZE HOW GOOD THEIR LIFE BECAUSE THEY ARE TO BUSY COMPLAINING ABOUT THE LITTLE THINGS IN LIFE AND HERE IT IS YOU HAVE ALL THIS STUFF GOING ON ON THE OTER SIDE OF THE WORLD AND ALSO NEAR WHERE YOU LIVE.
2006-09-13 22:27:05 · answer #5 · answered by JUICY T. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Holy crimeny girl. That shizzit is for real. I write poetry in my spare time to but that is way better than any thing i can come up with. U are the shizz.
Sincerely
~*Jake*~
2006-09-13 22:24:57 · answer #6 · answered by The Jake 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is nice, It is deep, I find it verry creative, and Worth an 'A' in a writing class, You might want to look in to doing somthing like this in school ^_^
2006-09-13 22:25:06 · answer #7 · answered by Adam D. 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds good, now just experience some of what you wrote, and you will learn to not complain as much, if at all.
2006-09-13 22:24:42 · answer #8 · answered by traveling_soldier6784 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good. You should write more about the Problems in the world.
2006-09-13 22:23:43 · answer #9 · answered by MJ 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sensitive and compassionate. Challenging yet encouraging.
2006-09-13 22:41:06 · answer #10 · answered by OnThe36th 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋