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Question

i have to corrent the following pharagraph using number 1 and 2

1. Change on of the sentences into a dependent clause with a subordinating conjunction (if, because, since, after, or when) or a relative pronoun (who, whom, whose, which, or that).



2. Separate the two sentences with a semicolon.





paragraph,


The day I started my first job was the most frustrating day of my life. I arrived at the restaurant early. Because no one showed me which door to enter so, I stood banging on the wrong door for several minutes. One of the cookers heard me; he laughed and told the other employees. This embarrassed me from the start. I didn’t know that my white shirt was wrong either; it had two pockets instead of one. Sherri, my manager, pointed this out. She said the personnel director should have told me about the dress code I said he had told me nothing but wear a white shirt. Anyway, the most frustrating part of the day was watching videos about setting a

Answer 1

My suggestion is

1) changing
"One of the cookers heard me; he laughed and told the other employees."
into
"When one of the cookers heard me, he laughed and told the other employees."

and

2) separating the following two sentences:
"She said the personnel director should have told me about the dress code I said he had told me nothing but wear a white shirt."
with a semicolon in this way:
"She said the personnel director should have told me about the dress code; I said he had told me nothing but wear a white shirt."


On a side note, this sentence:
"Because no one showed me which door to enter so, I stood banging on the wrong door for several minutes." doesn't seem right to me - either the "because" or the "so" should go...
making it either
(1) "Because no one showed me which door to enter, I stood banging on the wrong door for several minutes."
or
(2) "No one showed me which door to enter; so I stood banging on the wrong door for several minutes."

Could it be that it was actually this sentence that you were supposed to correct by using either (1) a dependent clause or (2) a semicolon to separate the two sentences?
Just my thought... maybe a misunderstanding in terms of what to do...?

Answer 2

Oh my God, I feel so sorry for you because that's about the most pointless stuff you could be given for homework. I think most people are better off without all that "analyzing" the language crap, because it just makes everything more confusing. Blah... teachers these days.

Answer 3

Do your own homework

Answer 4

this is ur homework u should do it on ur own