24 everytime
7 to the next
Spectrum or a sign
Why are they perplexed
We can only do so much
Just what is the limitation
One second out of touch
One moment evades erasing
I have found myself here
But which way am I facing
Two hands are moving
Only sometimes mine
The inertia of perpetual
Stops me in my tracks
This is just the usual
These are just the facts
2006-09-11 14:31:24 · 16 answers · asked by Thin King 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Yes you can.
Live your dream
2006-09-11 14:33:40 · answer #1 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
One of the most difficult things to do is to show your work to others, so I commend you! You have the desire to be a poet and you have some raw material to work with. If you are really interested in improving, I suggest reading as much poetry as you can, take an online course, and sign up for a writers workshop. Meanwhile, keep working on your poetry (it's something you obviously enjoy) and don't ever become afraid of asking for feedback.
2006-09-11 14:50:03 · answer #2 · answered by lauralovesbluesnjazz 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yah... just have people read it more get their opinions on how to make it better ans make changes to make it incredible. I'm a poet myself and Ill let people criticize and say what they want because its all just a way to learn from mistakes and make it awesome the next time i would re write it
2006-09-11 14:35:16 · answer #3 · answered by Scarlet5 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You may make it as a rapper, but not a poet. "The inertia of perpetual"? Do you even know what these words mean?
2006-09-11 14:32:33 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
NO! Your poem sounds like vague science fiction...it is not touching, nor romantic. It does not move the audience...in fact, I found it tedious!
If you cannot entertain or move others with your words, find a new hobby that you can support yourself with.
2006-09-11 14:32:59 · answer #5 · answered by : ) 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Yes you will. Just keep writing and believe in yourself. That poem was great.
2006-09-11 14:34:46 · answer #6 · answered by Nico 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Follow your dreams, but have something to fall back on. It's more who you know that what you know. Cover all your bases. Good luck.
2006-09-11 14:35:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very talented! Congrats on your gift! Write on!
2006-09-11 14:33:29 · answer #8 · answered by sweetie 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
OH---Poet!!! I thought it was pet!!!! Well, I can't seem to think of a funny reply to poet, but I had a great one for pet.
hmmmm.......
2006-09-11 14:33:51 · answer #9 · answered by Melissa C 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I don't think so. It sounds more like a ballad than a poem.
2006-09-11 14:34:40 · answer #10 · answered by Imagination 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋