I have been kind of writing love poems over the years. I am one line
away from creating the new one. What if I go like " Being with you
is like feeling supreme ecstasy." If you have a better word to
this line or even better last line please let me know.
2006-09-11 07:16:08 · 9 answers · asked by Jeanine 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Trivia
Hmm. A bit wordy. How about
Being with you is supreme ecstasy.
2006-09-11 07:22:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your presence is supreme ecstasy or Your nearness is supreme ecstasy.
2006-09-11 14:25:44 · answer #2 · answered by Chay 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd remove "like feeling" so it reads "being with you is supreme ecstasy."
2006-09-11 14:21:32 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're so financially draining I feel I must become a pusher and sell ecstasy.
2006-09-11 14:24:46 · answer #4 · answered by Wurm™ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If this is a sample of your poetry, give it up or take a creative writing class. You are too hung up in flighty words. Love is a simple concept...try expressing your love in terms of simplicity. You are too hung up in the complications of love rather than the simple act of loving.
2006-09-12 19:22:04 · answer #5 · answered by juncogirl3 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Being with you
is like feeling an orgasm.
2006-09-11 15:37:16 · answer #6 · answered by elclone 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how about being with you/having you is ultimate ecstasy
2006-09-11 18:23:26 · answer #7 · answered by Schlav!! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
youre my reality and everyone elses fantasy
2006-09-12 09:52:47 · answer #8 · answered by payal b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
use a diferent word. ecstacy doesnt rhyme with anything good.
2006-09-11 14:22:44 · answer #9 · answered by Stand-up Philosopher 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋