can someone give me advice on how to finish writing this?

Question

i am writing an opening for our yearbook, but i am having writer's block...the name of the yearbook is Linked as One, and our maskot is the hornet. I am trying to make it be about being connected as one...how can i make it sound better?

a hornet cannot survive alone in nature. hornets must work as a unit, as a single entity, to ensure that the dominion which they meticulously rule is fruitful. Each and every hornet is vital to the success of the colony; no role is insignificant. each one of these roles is a link in the interconnected chain. Although the Hornets of Pelham High School may not have realized it in the beginning, they were all connected in some way. Each team, each clique, each individual was a small part of the big picture


what can i say next?

Answer 1

One hornet cannot survive alone without other hornets. The insect must work as a team with other hornets to ensure that the dominion that they meticulously rule is fruitful. Each and every hornet is vital to the success of the colony; no role is insignificant. Each one of these roles is a link in the interconnected chain. Although the Hornets of Pelham High School may not have realized it in the beginning, they are all connected. Each team, each clique, each individual was a small part of the big picture

Answer 2

First, it's mascot (no k). When writing, keep everything in the same tense. Don't switch from present (am, are) to past (was, were), likewise keep the person constant (I, me, my, versus we, our, etc.) Other than that you have a great start.

Emphasize the collective force, the inability of one hornet to survive absent from the colony, etc.

Answer 3

WOW YOUR GOOD. I WAS ALSO ON MY YEARBOOK STAFF CLASS OF 1984, IN FRESNO CA. YOU NEED AN ENDING SOMETHING THAT SUMS UP THE WHOLE THING LIKE AS OUR LIVES GO ON IN THIS ADVENTURE CALLED LIFE AS WE GO ON NEVER FORGETTING OUR TIME AT PELHAM HIGH WITH GREAT HORNET PRIDE WE MAY GO ON IN OUR LIVES LIKE THE HORNET KNOWING THAT OUR TASK IS A GREAT ONE.

SOMETHING LIKE THAT TO SUM IT ALL UP GET THE POINT . GOOD LUCK.

Answer 4

For those who will move on next year, we know the skills that you have leaned here will be invaluable to the next swarm. Leading but always nurturing the new colony.

Answer 5

You've pretty much said it all. You might conclude by connecting the ideas to the future.

Answer 6

of pelham high.

i would just end it there. you pretty much have everything you need good job.