Are We There Yet?
We've seen every city
Every highway
We know everyone we've met
But, are we there yet?
Where else is there to go?
The endless oceans of togetherness?
Do we want that?
Will you say yes?
The 'Will you say yes?' line is the one I want to change. But, what to?
BTW, I am in the 7th grade now, I wrote this last night.
2006-09-09 14:23:38 · 10 answers · asked by bag1794 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
or is this our never ending quest?
2006-09-09 14:27:17 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can't find a cadence for it, but I like it the way it is... I wouldn't change anything but maybe the title to "Will You Say Yes?"
2006-09-09 14:29:05 · answer #2 · answered by KnowhereMan 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not too shabby.
Change the last two lines to:
Will we fly away?
And meet another day?
2006-09-09 14:26:42 · answer #3 · answered by Niche Jerk 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a beautiful poem and you are very talented!
Should we continue to press?
Might work
2006-09-09 14:29:34 · answer #4 · answered by hypothetical 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you could change the last 2 lines to:
Do i want that?
Do you want that?
2006-09-09 14:28:40 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
sound very good to me and if thoes are your thoughts it works
2006-09-09 14:25:23 · answer #6 · answered by arizonaprincess2 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds good the way you have it! Very good!
2006-09-09 14:27:58 · answer #7 · answered by Michelle : 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
try:
or will it just end in lonliness
(it will help u end it and it will leave ppl thinking)
2006-09-09 14:25:47 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
"will you say that"
2006-09-09 14:26:13 · answer #9 · answered by Ali G. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is really good wat stae r u in
2006-09-09 14:32:12 · answer #10 · answered by Ashlee 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋