Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you very much for your attention and participation. It is hoped that by working together we will be able to build our beloved nation to be better, more just and prosperous to all layers of society.
2006-09-05 09:07:15 · 12 answers · asked by Verdi 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
Try the following:
"Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you very much for your attention and participation. It is hoped that by working together we will be able to build our beloved nation to become a better, more just and prosperous home to all layers of society."
2006-09-05 09:15:30 · answer #1 · answered by asyuti_angel 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
> Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you very much for your attention and participation. It is hoped that by working together we will be able to build our beloved nation to be better, more just and prosperous to all layers of society.
This is grammatically correct. But I would eliminate the "ladies-and-gentlemen," the passive voice, and the other speech-like stylistics. I'd simply say:
By working cooperatively, we can assure that our society is a just and prosperous one.
(Better isn't needed. It's too general.)
2006-09-05 16:16:59 · answer #2 · answered by jackbutler5555 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you for your attention and your participation. By working together, we will build our beloved nation into a better, more just and prosperous society for all.
2006-09-05 18:57:21 · answer #3 · answered by old lady 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you very much for your attention and partiicipation. We hope that by working together we will be able to build our beloved nation into a better, more just, and more prosperous society for everyone.
2006-09-05 16:10:49 · answer #4 · answered by Monica M 2 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you very much for your attention and participation. It is (my)/(our) hope, by working together, we can build our beloved nation to be a more just and prosperous land for all members of society.
2006-09-05 16:14:41 · answer #5 · answered by Genie 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you immensly for your attention and involvement. It is hoped that by performing together we will be able to develop our beloved nation to be better, more just and prosperous to all facets of society.
Just a thought
2006-09-05 16:29:39 · answer #6 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It is not correct.
And, it is too wordy for a brochure. Leave out the entire first sentence. I fyou must keep it, leave out "ladies and gentleman," and "very much".
Rewrite the entire second sentence. Break it up into 2 or 3 sentences.
2006-09-05 16:52:03 · answer #7 · answered by limendoz 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. Even if it will be grammatically corrected, these words are not valid for a brochure, they are fine for a speech but not brochure.
2006-09-05 16:16:00 · answer #8 · answered by Totti Frotti 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
they are grammatically correct, however they are not acceptable for a brochure, you need to be more friendly like you and the reader have been friends for as long as you can remember
2006-09-05 16:13:17 · answer #9 · answered by Lynx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great for a speech... bad for a brochure.
2006-09-05 16:26:06 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋