Ladies/Gentlemen, the philanthropists, let us compete in doing good deeds so that we’ll get blessing for what we have obtained in this world and for more just, secure and comfortable world for all (a true prosperity).
2006-09-05 09:04:54 · 6 answers · asked by Verdi 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
Ladies and Gentlemen, Let us compete in doing good deeds so that we will be blessed by what we have accomplished in this world. Let us strive for a more just, secure and comfortable world for all, which is the nature of true prosperity.
2006-09-05 09:20:50 · answer #1 · answered by Taivo 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it is not grammatically correct and is a run on sentence. It also does not flow very well.
Here is a suggestion of how to re-word it.
Ladies and Gentlemen,
As philanthropists, let us compete in doing good deeds in thanks for the blessings that have been bestowed upon us. Let us make the world a more just, secure and comfortable place for all; giving everyone a chance for true prosperity.
Good luck
2006-09-05 16:17:12 · answer #2 · answered by Mary K 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a HUGE run-on sentence and is rife with subject/verb agreement errors. Trash this one and start over.
2006-09-05 16:07:56 · answer #3 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i cant tell what you mean by "the philanthropists". also say "get THE blessing" not just get blessing.
2006-09-05 16:08:32 · answer #4 · answered by Punchy 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No, you have errors.
2006-09-05 16:08:39 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. No. NO.
2006-09-05 16:08:08 · answer #6 · answered by Robin A. 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋