I'm crossing the road all aone;
Looking for someone to be my own.
Someone that will be forever mine;
who will cross the road with me, at all time.
Waiting, searching, even praying
wishing for God to heed my calling.
oh please tell me, when will it be?
Cant wait for the person that is meant for me.
At last, i found you
Hope you like me too
Ca't understand this new feeling
Wherever I look, you're the one I'm seeing
Oh, God, guide, is this love that I'm in
Or a mere infatuation, or just nothing it seem.
But if it is love then I can't wait to tell him
That I love him and he's my everything.
Very happy to have met you
Filling the empty space in my heart, is what you do
But still, I don't know how you really feel,
If it is love or friendship stil.
Time passes, days run so fast
Even the happiness that I felt, thought it would last
Discovered that in your life and in your heart
Have no place for me to be a part.
I'm only 16, i'm not good at flowery words, but im learning.
2006-09-04 23:42:45 · 12 answers · asked by Angeline_Love16 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
What a wonderful poem! From the very beginning, I was captivated. The line "Waiting, searching, even praying
wishing for God to heed my calling." was very touching to me because it is how I feel about my love situation now too.
I have to admit that it really made me cry a little, but it just spoke personally to me. I think you're a very good writer and encourage you to stick with it. It is amazing when a writer can touch you like that. Thank you for sharing.
2006-09-04 23:48:47 · answer #1 · answered by Roger S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you have a promising potential to be a great writer. Flowery words aren't needed for a good ode to someone you love. Your heart is your tool to good writing.
2006-09-05 06:51:26 · answer #2 · answered by Zephyr 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem really really fantastic for ur age keep practicing and one day u will be the greatest best of luck
are u a 16 yr old then itz gr8
well can we be friends
i am mihir and i am 16 too
my email id is mihir7337@yahoo.co.in
2006-09-05 06:44:51 · answer #3 · answered by might 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i had a happy and sad feeling about this one but it's simply sweet and pure....
good job check out mine i did it when i was 16
for a 16 year older this is "simple and clean" as they say from a Japanese Song.
just keep it up you'll get there as long as you've got that inspiration you'll do more in the futures to come...depends on your experiences in life off course....
2006-09-05 06:49:08 · answer #4 · answered by SEDATED 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is not only OK , yes its wonderful , pl do keep it up nice writting like this . One day you will be remembered . Good luck .
2006-09-05 06:46:50 · answer #5 · answered by your noon 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Just lovely.
2006-09-05 07:52:51 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good. Keep learning.
2006-09-05 06:45:58 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
For your age? Not bad at all, dear
2006-09-05 06:46:52 · answer #8 · answered by westgaliberty 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
to tell you the truth i think its BEAUTIFUL . Be proud of yourself you write very well..
2006-09-05 06:48:34 · answer #9 · answered by bullit_77 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
does this come from the heart?? if it does you have a really nice heart and you should listen to it......
2006-09-05 06:46:16 · answer #10 · answered by ET 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋