I thought I was in love, that this guy I saw was sent down here from up above,I'm too young to be in love, right now I'm just a free dove. This guy I thought I was in love withis my biggest crush,everytime he walks by I start to blush. Everytime I look at him my heart stops it's beat, you could never meet another guy like him because he's really sweet. He's probably not the guy most girls would date,but he's special to me and I think he's really great. I know if I asked him out he would say no, so I'm going to forget about it, let it go. I don't know if this guy likes me back, but if he did I would be lucky not to have a heart attack. This guy I like is really nice to me for him I could write so much poetry. When he looks at me with those bright eyes of his, it makes me feel like I have butterflies, like right before a quiz. He is handsome, it would be hard for me not to take a glance, he is so lovely, with him I would dance. He's a fun guy to hang out with,sometimes he's mysterious.
2006-09-04 13:39:43 · 15 answers · asked by hiddentiger_15 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
I think it's good. But lots of luck on getting it published. This is so hard to do. Nothing at all against your poem. Because like I said, I think it is good. But getting ANYTHING published is hard work. And persistance. I had a friend of mine who did this. Sent in tons of things he wrote. And just a few things got published. Just want to let you know, you really have to want this. And don't ever take anything personal. Or mean you are not good. My friend wrote things that touched my heart and still had trouble.
BTW - my daughter, like you, writes. I think it's a great talent to have.
2006-09-04 13:52:15 · answer #1 · answered by lvsorchid 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you had asked, "...is my poem good enough?" I'd have answered, "Only if it is honest and expresses your true feelings."
And the concern I would have is that in order to make your poem rhyme you have manipulated the expressions of your love: "I don't know if this guy likes me back ...a heart attack."
Here's what I suggest: Forget about publication just now. Instead, concentrate on saying what you really feel. Just write each thought on a line. Don't think about rhyming. Think about being honest in saying how you feel. For example:
I think I'm in love with this guy. Did he really drop from the sky?
I'm too young to be in love because I don't know what love is.
My first line is corny--I know--but if you write things down as honestly as you can, you're making a good start. Poetry making is a whole other subject, but once you learn to write honestly you are ready to read books on poetry, books of poetry, and--if the gods are kind--someday you will be a poet.
Getting published? Write good poems, and trust that someone will recognize your talent and want to spread your work. AnneM
2006-09-04 15:26:21 · answer #2 · answered by Annie M 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In order to be a respected poet in academia, you need to have gone through rigorous training in both literature, philosophy, and other areas of the humanities. Read people like Whitman and Eliot to see what I mean. There's nothing wrong with the poem content. Many of us fall in love this way but your way of expressing yourself poetically is cliche and boring. That's why you need to study other poets and writers to gain your own sense of originality. It takes work; don't be discouraged, keep going!
2006-09-04 13:55:38 · answer #3 · answered by fairykarma 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Writing takes practice and experimentation. Keep practicing, keep working, keep the passion going inside of you. Is this publishable, probably not? BUT, if it's what you love, don't every let anyone stop you. KEEP WORKING! NEVER GIVE UP!
2006-09-04 16:10:04 · answer #4 · answered by TrainerMan 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A person should be well read and sufficiently educated before striving for publication. That said ... nope it's not good enough for a rap song.
2006-09-04 14:07:15 · answer #5 · answered by Sam 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems doesn't have to rhyme ever other sentence. If its your first try, its good. Keep up the good work.
2006-09-04 13:49:07 · answer #6 · answered by Retarded Dave 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sory but no this is something everyone else has wrote try another about something different! Good luck! If you think its good enough you should try it..... no matter what any one says!
2006-09-04 13:46:04 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No, but you have some ability but more emotion... save it and when you read it again in 15 years... you will laugh your thang off
2006-09-04 13:48:04 · answer #8 · answered by ohyeah 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its a good peom if your young. You might be able to publish it.?
2006-09-04 13:44:38 · answer #9 · answered by jayhawker 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the content is good..but the best poems dont rhyme..good luck
2006-09-04 13:42:29 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋