One day I knew you'd come to see
the things you sought were all in me
one day you would realize
oh my god she is that girl
you tore me down and killed my dream
but things arent what they seem
by destroying me you saved my life
you broke my back and I learned to fight
wandered aimless in the night
I'd fall apart at even the sight
but looking at you now I know Im alright
I found the way, the truth, the life.
This is an original poem by me D.C.C.
2006-08-30 10:01:41 · 13 answers · asked by dreamgirl4myboy 4 in Pregnancy & Parenting ➔ Other - Pregnancy & Parenting
When I was very young I met this boy I lost my virginty to him and like most girls dream about having a family with him but when I was having a really hard time in my life I found out he really didnt care about me at all even though I had been giving him every part of my self for nearly 6 years. He never even told me he loved me. I was 11 when I met him. I hadnt talked to him in years, He called me a few months ago to tell me he loves me, he has always loved me and he wants to marry me. I am engaged to someone who truly loves me. I have a poem about him too!
2006-08-30 10:13:48 · update #1
This is the poem about my fiance and I realize how my previous comment sound I wasnt 11 when we did it lol
Just so much more
too much to be ignored and
look at what youve done
no need for more my only one
my love, my perfect patience waiting
your eyes, your lips, my love debating
I love you more, I love you more
far too many to keep a score
more and more and more and more
then it comes
what I adore
hacer el amor
2006-08-30 10:16:53 · update #2
lol only because it rhymed
2006-08-31 03:57:04 · update #3
they are nice it think
and did you put that last line in spanish because you were ashamed of making love or cause it righmed? LOL
2006-08-30 10:48:55 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Bravo ! Short and to the point. Touching but not overly dramatic.I would say good for you.
2006-08-30 17:09:22 · answer #2 · answered by zen2bop 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice, i think u should publish it and u'll make a lot of money cos that's what i'm into.
2006-08-30 17:10:34 · answer #3 · answered by hajo 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good. it could use a little work. take it to the printers and they can help u and they ca publish it!!
2006-08-30 17:04:15 · answer #4 · answered by Ariel 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really Good!!
2006-08-30 17:07:43 · answer #5 · answered by ♥mommy of 4♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love ur poem
2006-08-30 17:15:30 · answer #6 · answered by Ely 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is nice. But what is it pertaining to.
2006-08-30 17:07:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
It is pretty good !
2006-08-30 17:05:08 · answer #8 · answered by brandi.smiles 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its allright
2006-08-30 17:11:17 · answer #9 · answered by SwordDancer 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its nice,
2006-08-30 17:04:14 · answer #10 · answered by 0000000000000000000000 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋