All my life ive been searching,all my life its been there,the love inside me waiting for you to love & to hold and care,ive walked this planets beaches,ive walked the streets in vain,ive waited well gone thirty years for you to call my name.
To call my name to hold my hand to walk with me upon the sand, to lay on our backs on the beach at night,to hear the waves crashing as we count the stars so bright.
Soulmate where are you dear,are you far or are you near,i wish god would give me a sign,i wish he would give me a clue,i wish i knew where you are,soulmate i really need you.
The internet did give me some scope and ive spent years of endless nights browsing away with hope in my heart at the millions of dating sites,theres promising times & ive made good friends along the way,but the love of my life is still out there waiting to make my day.
Soulmate please show yourself to me darling & fill this void in my life,kiss me,hold me, love me forever and let me make you my wife.
2006-08-28 11:00:16 · 11 answers · asked by Richard 6 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Don't know any songs by the foo fighters so can't blame me for anyhing that looks the same as their work.
2006-08-28 11:40:17 · update #1
It's lovely but it's more prose tham poem but still lovely I'll marry u....:)
2006-08-28 14:47:57 · answer #1 · answered by charlotte e 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is more in prose style at the moment. some of the rhymes are quite good,
Have you got any more positive bits you could put in
Some people never meet their love however much they pay
Learn to love yourself and love will surely come your way
2006-08-28 11:08:53 · answer #2 · answered by Alison M 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I have been the religious style i might have enjoyed it. yet I did like the 1st 2 lines very plenty. by some potential I consistently seen the sunlight a he however the morning may well be a she. I thak you Abba grew to become into alluring too.
2016-11-05 23:41:41 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well being a published poet myself i would say it is iffy okay...needs a little work but i like the story of it sounds nice and interesting just needs some help or different wording in there different rhyming maybe
2006-08-28 11:07:10 · answer #4 · answered by fantasia91273 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its ok, maybe it needs a bit of work here and there, you should put it to music as a song. something like a I IV V progression would suit that type of writing.
2006-08-28 11:26:10 · answer #5 · answered by andylefty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, honestly, I hate love right now but your poem is so romantic and sad. Good luck finding her. I wish you the best of luck.
2006-08-28 11:07:21 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a bit dreary, make the lines shorter and more punchy, i drifted off half way through. good try though, keep it up
2006-08-28 11:06:47 · answer #7 · answered by jo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
. . . not one ciggie all day 'til I read that !!! now I'm puffing on a Compact (agree with inspecta - a bit ruff) . . .
2006-08-28 11:57:10 · answer #8 · answered by Astra 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good purpose and way of expressing yourself. i think it was long and repeating. other wise don't stop and congratulate yourself because you've helped me get reviews on my own poetry. thanks and good luck!
2006-08-28 11:14:25 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
'yawwwwwwwwn' yippeee lets all copy n paste total crap on yahoo answers
2006-08-28 14:11:54 · answer #10 · answered by bootlepete 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋