Me and you are meant to be,
ph baby can't you see,
my love will set you free,
from all your troubles and misery,
and baby when your with me,
I'll make you forget reality.
darling I know I give you butterflies,
when I talk about taking you across the skies,
you blush cause I speak the truth and not lies,
I can tell it all by the look in your eyes.
baby you are one of a kind,
whoever can't see that is blind,
Im going out of my mind,
cause I found the love I though I'd never find,
its strong and well-defined.
baby with me there is no pain,
nothing to lose only to gain,
we can travel from Paris, France to Barcelona, Spain,
baby I got loads more to explain,
but for now don't throw our love down the drain.
2006-08-19 18:15:55 · 34 answers · asked by Romeo31 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i know im not a lady but i thought i would make a suggestion anyway
if uve got a decent voice and know how to play the guitar then sing it to her works every time
2006-08-19 18:29:11 · answer #1 · answered by cowboy76360 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your rhymes are really overly contrived. By which I mean you only picked those words because they rhyme and not because what you meant to say, and it comes through in the writing. Each line is either too generic and cliche or too random and awkward. But I'm a guy, girls are stupid. Maybe she'll like it. She'll probably like it.
2006-08-19 18:22:11 · answer #2 · answered by mwells0629 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
She'll love the poem and the bard
It's easy to see, it's not that hard
The love you share will always grow
Because your heart emits a glow.
Very well done. She would have to be crazy NOT to love it.
You are very romantic and talented.
She's a lucky girl. I think she'll melt.
2006-08-19 18:30:02 · answer #3 · answered by Molly 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like the poem. It make me imagine of two people I genuinely have lose and are very pricey to my heart and that i imagine after I pout flora out on their graves i am going to take your poem with me and skim it their so i think a touch more beneficial effectual and that i recognize that your words congort me. thanks! you're a experienced and proficient writter! My the lord bless you and your household.
2016-11-05 05:12:56 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good except for the ph at the beginning of the 2nd line. if you give this to your girlfriend you better be prepared to have a long term committment or break up... the break up would be on her part if its too soon in the relationship and she gets spooked
2006-08-19 18:22:03 · answer #5 · answered by brattach 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
add to the end
bc me without you would be eternal pain
its ok for a beginner i am a published poet i got 4 published n 3 editors choice awards
register at poetry.com and see what happens
2006-08-19 18:21:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think she will love it. If you could find a new line whre you say it's strong and well defined. Maybe tell her she blows your mind.
Nice job Romeo!
2006-08-19 18:21:48 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice. The 2 last parts are very sweet. I think she'll like it.
2006-08-19 18:22:27 · answer #8 · answered by ginie_in_a_bottle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's corny but sweet. The last line is stupid, so I'd change it if I were you. Always play to a girl's emotions, that's how we we are built: for emotional stimulation. Use it but don't abuse it!
2006-08-19 18:19:54 · answer #9 · answered by Susie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That has got to be the sweetest thing i've ever heard, she will definatly love it oh and I would try to rap it beacuse it sounds that great.
2006-08-19 18:21:42 · answer #10 · answered by chikkita818 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋