a new poem plz rate?
Well I like someone new.
I think I love you its true.
Your just so wonderful to me.
I guess you just can’t see.
I think you like me too.
But I really don’t have a clue!
You seem like a lot of fun.
Now with you I just want to run.
All these kissy faces are for you.
I’ve liked you for a while but you never knew.
So I’m just hoping that we can get together.
And stay that way forever and ever.
2006-08-18 18:36:18 · 8 answers · asked by KJ 2 in Food & Drink ➔ Non-Alcoholic Drinks
im sorry honey you need to keep your day job
2006-08-18 18:43:16 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
cute for a teenage love poem from a guy to a girl but the other way around for adults its a little queer. SOme suggestions to make it better: get rd of the kissy face line and dont make it so "rhymish" it makes it childish. Good start though, it could be good with a few minor improvements.
2006-08-20 03:33:29 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
ok so my first impression is that it has a good meaning and the voice is expression some deep feeling for another person, but the rhyme scheme is a little off because it makes the poem kinda cheesy.
2006-08-18 18:44:55 · answer #3 · answered by Jugglingmidget06 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u used i think, i guess, just, i hope, .... these words are meaningless in a poem. poems usually contain the words which reveal some ideas and themes. these word does not reveal any thing about the peom.
well, ....
2006-08-18 18:57:08 · answer #4 · answered by ___ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
kool but sappy i give u a 9
2006-08-18 18:43:26 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
How does this relate to "Non- acholic drinks"
Answar me that and ill give you my answar!
2006-08-18 18:44:05 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it good
2006-08-19 02:37:55 · answer #7 · answered by WatNevaeh 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
mmmmmmmm............... i think its ..............................
You guess!!!!!!!!!!
2006-08-18 18:42:41 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋