Life is a journey,
We travel differnent roads
but who can say That in the end
They do not converge
I have found friends
Among many unlikely places
Each is different and unique
And each brings something special
Into my life with the meeting.
I can only hope
That I have touched their lives
In some small way
The same as they have touched mine
{I know that it does not rhyme. It is called freeverse and is not supposed to have rhyme or meter.}.
2006-08-18 15:05:26 · 27 answers · asked by Debra M. Wishing Peace To All 7 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
i think its good and says alot
2006-08-18 15:10:58 · answer #1 · answered by Auryheana 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Somehow, I don't feel any depth and impact to it.
I think the ending line limits the poem,
"The same as they have touched mine"
This line sounds quite calculating, hence it lacks spontaneity. It gives me the impression that its written from the mind rather than from the heart. The writer might have written it while thinking "I need to write something" rather than "I feel this thing that I need to put in writing".
Hope this helps.
2006-08-18 22:16:18 · answer #2 · answered by Tuna-San 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I am quite a fan of free verse! This poem is rich and shows your attitude towards life. A very natural poem, not laden with smug, pretentious imagery that a lot of poets use. In think you should keep on writing and share it often.
2006-08-18 22:14:59 · answer #3 · answered by Alcheme 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is touching.
In our homogeneous society, does traveling different roads mean going to an ice cream social at the Greek Orthodox church instead of the Methodist? Or does it mean visiting someone you know on death row or talking to Mayan farmers in Mexico?
2006-08-18 22:11:53 · answer #4 · answered by valcus43 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
One of the only poems i've actually felt anything towards.
I truly enjoyed this poem, and i thank you for taking the time to post it.
2006-08-19 01:28:59 · answer #5 · answered by Ashton Kage 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is very ingenuous and simplistic. I like it because it is true and uncontrived. It is especially true that we meet special friends in unlikely places, in a random sort of way.
2006-08-18 22:16:06 · answer #6 · answered by holly lpoemreader 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Life is a journey why don't you tell the world what rome has done they change scripture in the name of the Lord. whether its right or wrong come clean for you can be saved. tell low tell em high tell them world wide .
2006-08-18 22:45:27 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
take your converge on a different path and then merge them. you obiviously met them already so say as they came into my life? in life's journey...we travel different paths... some paths may cross but you never know as you move thru live...someone you met in life used you as inspiration and changed a life...because of you. work with it
2006-08-18 22:21:26 · answer #8 · answered by robyn 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Debra - I enjoyed your poem. Thank you for sharing it with us. I encourage you to write daily, even if it makes no sense at all. It will energize your creative side.
2006-08-18 22:11:16 · answer #9 · answered by 'Barn 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
E X C E L L E N T !!! I enjoyed it very much..>Thanks for sharing
2006-08-18 22:11:07 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I love poetry. I write poems when the feeling hits me. your poem is very nice. keep writing.
2006-08-18 22:11:13 · answer #11 · answered by Ginnykitty 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋