Anyone of course can read and post but I expect that most who are not Catholics or other types of Christians may not understand or approve of it and I do not want to offend.
Peace Be With You,
Debra
My Lover sent a letter
To show His love to me.
Written across the sky,
For all the world to see.
There was beauty in the colors
In the air and in the breeze.
Whispers of "I love you."
Echoed through the trees.
He fed me sweets unworldly.
Sweeter than sweetest wine.
Meat richer than any steak.
These gifts that were mine.
I felt His warm embrace.
More secure than I've ever known.
These gifts were for the world.
They were not for me alone.
I told Him that I love Him.
Tears fell from my eyes.
I sent my love towards Him,
Somewhere up in the skies
2006-08-17 07:31:59 · 46 answers · asked by Debra M. Wishing Peace To All 7 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Yes I write rambles sometimes. I wrote this this morning after Adoration and Mass.
2006-08-17 07:38:25 · update #1
LOL No I am not a nun although I am a Third Order Secular Franciscan. And this is how I feel about Christ.
2006-08-17 07:39:55 · update #2
No I do not have a title for it I do not often name my poems.
2006-08-17 07:47:09 · update #3
I have no problem with anyone who wishes copying or sharing. That is why I chose to share it today.
2006-08-17 07:49:07 · update #4
nice one
i m a muslim
2006-08-17 07:38:20 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a beautiful sentiment, except for the choice of the word Lover which may strike some as odd or errant. Consider making it My Love rather than "lover?" Just a thought to help it communicate what you intend.
I wrote one a while back, perhaps you would enjoy it? It relates a theophany (appearance of God) to Native Americans and what it might mean.
http://www.geocities.com/counttheways/whitebison.html
2006-08-17 07:42:21 · answer #2 · answered by Just David 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is an excellent poem. One could close their eyes and imagine an amazing spring day where everything just seems right and perfect. Nature is an art to be unsurpassed and God is the artist to whom we all strive to follow.
The only thing I would possibly tamper with would be the line
Meat richer than any steak.
although it goes with theme I feel like it takes away the blissful feeling of lightness and purity. I don't know its just a suggestion.
God Bless
2006-08-17 07:41:52 · answer #3 · answered by christopher p 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very Beautiful
2006-08-17 07:38:32 · answer #4 · answered by sammyw1024 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Debra,
I just responded to your question regarding the "loving Christian or Hate Mail" and after I decided to check out your other postings and I absolutely love this poem. I thank the Holy Spirit for His urgings to me to come and look and not just ignore. It is just beautiful and I commend you for posting it and who knows just how many souls you have touched with this beautiful gift from God in your ability to write. Thank you and don't let the lost souls get you down. I am Catholic also and we do get a lot of that "Catholic Bashing" out here but I thank God for His gift of faith to me, and I will definitely keep you in prayer. May the Peace of our Lord be with you always!
2006-08-17 15:15:47 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful!
2006-08-17 07:39:02 · answer #6 · answered by Armerys 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
My first reaction was 'Cool beans!' The poem reminds me of the Song of Songs (a.k.a. the Song of Solomon), which while in a literal sense is about sexual love between a man and a woman, is often interpreted as an allegory of our relationship with God.
2006-08-17 07:39:44 · answer #7 · answered by songkaila 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its beautiful
Aaron
I am the Seer: for in you I see
The fair unfolding of a secret flower,
The pomp and pageant of eternal power,
The crown and pride of your high destiny.
I am the Prophet: this your prophecy—
Your deeds and Heaven’s fill the echoing hour,
The Splendour of all splendours for your dower
Is given, a witness of the things to be.
I am the Poet, but I cannot sing
Of your dear worth, or mortal or divine;
No music hidden in any song of mine
Can give you praise; yet the trimmed rod I bring
To you, O Temple, asking, for a sign,
That in the morn it may be blossoming.
2006-08-17 07:42:31 · answer #8 · answered by love peace 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A very beautiful poem!!!
Almost like something you'd read in the Song of Songs.:-)
God Bless!
2006-08-17 08:34:36 · answer #9 · answered by clusium1971 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is a very sweet poem. Submit it to a Christian magazine or newspaper.
I might fix the rhythms of a couple of lines, such as "These gifts that were mine" and "More secure than I've ever known". Maybe "These gifts that he made mine" or "These gifts that now are mine", and "More secure than I had known" or "More secure than ever known". And maybe "Tears trickled from my eyes" or "Tears fell beneath my eyes".
2006-08-17 07:44:13 · answer #10 · answered by MNL_1221 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is a lovely poem, or prayer.
Does it have a title? Do you know the author? Thank you for sharing it with us.
I am a non practicing catholic.
2006-08-17 07:43:26 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋