Tell me fellow atheists if you like my poem........LOL
Shoogey, boogey puddin pie
I think the bible is a lie
It told me I would go to hell
If I don't believe, I don't, Oh well
I don't believe "god" is up there
In giant golden underware
I grew up in church, you see
And all that crap was taught to me.
But, I'm an atheist, much better now
Don't pray to "god" allah or cows
I know my life is what I make it
No old book will change or take it
I don't care what you believe in
When everything fun is a big sin
So you be you, and I'll be me
In America we are all free
To believe however we want to
Don't judge me and I won't judge you.
2006-08-16 03:35:57 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
i think the poem is perfect and jesus himself was an atheist he said so in matthew chapter 7 verse 2-3 when he said DONT JUDGE
2006-08-16 03:43:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
Flows pretty well.
For some reason, the first line just bugs me. It seems so very out of place.
I may suggest removing this incongruency by either rewriting the first line or by peppering the rest of the poem with similarly nonsense phrases. In a sense, it becomes a Dr. Seuss atheist poem then.
Just by itself, I just don't like the first line.
2006-08-16 03:39:48 · answer #2 · answered by Rev Kev 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Flows stunning sturdy. For some reason, the same old line in basic terms bugs me. It seems so very out of area. i might recommend putting off this incongruency via the two rewriting the same old line or via peppering the entertainment of the poem with further nonsense words. In a fashion, it rather is going to become a Dr. Seuss atheist poem then. in basic terms via itself, I in basic terms do no longer in basic terms like the same old line.
2016-09-29 08:11:48 · answer #3 · answered by kuhlmann 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
should be underwear, not underware,
And try,
"I grew up goin' to church, you see," See if that flows better (all the other lines are between 8 and 10 syllables).
Also, I think "in america we are all free" should be a statement unto itself, so maybe altering the next line to:
"We can believe what we want to,"
Just a few suggestions..
Addendum: Damn, I really cannot stand when people just copy and paste a whole mess of irrelevant stuff from pre-selected passages. Do they really expect anyone to read them?
2006-08-16 03:46:02 · answer #4 · answered by 006 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful, Simply Beautiful!!
2006-08-16 03:41:45 · answer #5 · answered by midtownhazard 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love the poem, but the first line sounds like it's out of the nightmare before christmas....lol
2006-08-16 03:47:38 · answer #6 · answered by bellita_716 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is not for me to judge
nor to ever hold a grudge
But God alone will be The One
To judge when all is said and done
You may trust yourself you see
but what about eternity
The soul won't die nor decay
We'll face our deeds on Judgement Day.
Here you go, hope this helps.
2006-08-16 03:46:51 · answer #7 · answered by Madeamove 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Excellent! But I have a suggestion for an alternate first line that would be a better hook, imho:
Try to save me and I'll reply...
2006-08-16 03:41:44 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Along with Enron,
the concept of God
is clearly,
inherently,
suspect as fraud.
2006-08-16 03:40:13 · answer #9 · answered by Blackacre 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like the first line.
2006-08-16 03:39:20 · answer #10 · answered by Corn_Flake 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋