Lovely was the aalam(its an urdu word, means surroundings)
Amazing was the day
Surrounded by the barriers,
Still felt wind blowing away
Great was the pleasure
Moon was lit, along with was sun’s shine
In one blink, like a dream
It was all pacifying
Elating was the spirit, when I saw you
The very first time
Addictive is your site
Addictive is the style
That wise look
That amazing smile
Without them I guess
Now,
I can’t stay
Even for a while.
Achy is my situation
Achy is this one tough mile
If you feel the same
You can find this pin in the straw pile.
i wrote this to ask a girl out - long time back. i don know if girls still like poems or is it out of trend?
2006-08-11 19:34:21 · 11 answers · asked by i don know y 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Never, ever give this to a girl.
"Achy is my situation?" Seriously now.
And what's the deal with "Moon was lit, along with was sun’s shine?" Is that possible?
Seriously, just steal a poem and say it reminded you of her. You should never write a poem again. Ever.
And on the lighter side, I wholeheartedly agree with the first answer.
2006-08-11 19:41:18 · answer #1 · answered by Sir Sandwich Slayer 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey the word ALAM is great in use .You done a lot of home work but i think in middle you lost the spirit as begin with and some of grammer mistakes are also there.
But to ask a girl out by a poem can be very crucial , most girls like poem but not all someone can hit you back after listening a poem .
Try it buddy may be, whom you are proposing ,understand you and give you a nice hug.
But it is a hope only .
Your answer is nope.!
2006-08-12 02:42:58 · answer #2 · answered by kellen_de 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a nice poem but it might scare a girl off if she doenslt know you well. I'd ask her out another way and give her the poem for like an anniversary or something.
2006-08-12 02:42:15 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes sure... thats good enough to invite girl for a date... can i suggest something... its very very nice if the used words were all came from the heart... poem is the reflection of the one who wrote it... a little bit deep inside make it more fabulous. So cmon, write another one!
2006-08-12 03:34:54 · answer #4 · answered by latteen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it I would atleast give you a chance. and yes poems can still work just depends on the girl that's all.
2006-08-12 02:39:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you are sincere,
so am i
i do not like the poem
write another
keep it simple
sweet
or do not make a poem
just speak from your wonderful lheart
2006-08-12 02:43:42 · answer #6 · answered by Maureen K 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
We LOVE poems. They will never be "out of trend". And this poem is sooo nice.
2006-08-12 02:38:53 · answer #7 · answered by Marina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
All I have to say is this poem is
FREAKIN' AWESOME
I was touched even though I am a guy!
(I don't swing that way)
2006-08-13 21:55:09 · answer #8 · answered by Ericelephant 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
poems are so in if they are short and sweet!
but im sorry to say it sounds shallow thuogh. very uninteresting!
2006-08-12 02:40:14 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very sweet but I think someone you are already dating would appreciate it more.
2006-08-12 02:37:32 · answer #10 · answered by Erin M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋